VA:

you had a good verse.. the emotion was decent, there wasnt a ton of emotion but it didnt lack either.. decent structure.. good flow.. good consistency.. i liked the story-line idea.. it worked pretty well for you.. imagery could have been better but it was also good..

overall : 7.5/10

Hells Fire:

first of all this is the best topical piece you have wrote.. second good name change the bwall name was too much of a hassle to write. anyways you had a good verse also.. and the best thing in your verse was the imagery it outshined verbals imagery by tons.. every line was descriptive... but you could have wrote the verse better in general.. it was too hard to follow.. i couldnt see where u were going with it so your consistently suffered.. emotion was ok.. structure was pretty good...

overall :7/10

vote: verbal abuse

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