When citizens & kids lose faith like they lost at sea...
Total destruction... aint' no hypocrisy..
..This is the product of my own blood and tears
...a sinner lost in a cloud of fire consuming lvoe and fears
...now if you hear this song and think I'm goin' sacrilegious
...yo didn't understand but I just aksed forgiveness

i really enjoyed this, although i think the first paragraph/stanza/whatever didn't flow as good as the last two, i thought you packed too much vocab, and it was a little uneven and a little hard to read.......but overall, pretty amazing piece, shows that you have a great deal of understanding/wisdom of history and you are a very talented writer....hall of fame for sure, you can even post this in that forum because im going to say this should be in there for sure.....so yeah, very good piece, i was feeling those ^ lines the most, thought they really stood out....unique structure, and the chorus was perfect, loved it, ahhaha, definately keep droppin man......

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