this was nice... better than the other OMs ive peeped...

good emotion...the 'inner' imagry you had was great... the first few bars that have to do with the psycology of the character is great... very well done, im fond of that as well. you had good rhymes... a LIL weak on the rhyme scheme but it fit the peace... Strong rhyme may have made it a BIT more intelligent but the scheme it had fit.
the imagry was good... i had a good image of what you were saying...props on that...

overall, a nice peace...good job...
NOW...hit my OM

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