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Old 12-11-05, 08:43 PM   #17
Mentalz
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Voted For: Ysdat

Ok, Both of these seemed fairly rushed, neither very good.

Ysdat had a better concept, more imagery and a nice twist in the end. I didnt care for the bad grammar, no spelling. Lack of punctuation that made it come across, rushed. Good flow, loved the twist at the end. Nice show of emotion.

Dopium's structure was fucked, but that doesnt really matter. you had nice flow, lacked the imagery ysdat's piece held. Your concept wasnt as imaginitive as his was, and in my book that wins topicals. Nice use of vocab, a few parts you fell off.
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