okay heres the deal im new here at rapbattles, i was on rapdis a long while back b4 they closed down. ne ways i forgot i had to call someone out to battle em , and i ended up posting this on the battle board withought asking cutastraphe if he wanted to battle. but i dont wanna put these lyrics to waste, cause perhaps i can get some critique off of it... so please leave and give and suggestions that might help me progress.

shoutout to my boi Speak.E.Z
pz,
F-a-L-L-e-N

FaLLeN MaKen an AttAcK @
cutastraphe



what was fallen sure will rise again//
now u gonna have to tend to this new lyrical trend//
speak.e.z old sk00l rapdis friend , u know who this be//
it be me the fallen one reborn wit the strength of ali, and the "gracefullness" of fucking "bamb-i"//
Only wish dis cat were heavy weight nuff to take on a real emcee like Speak.E.Z//
guy flows so "swift" "make a still room feel breezy"//
trying to be a heavy weight , why its measly like ez my words are like proclomations that u couldnt even utter beneath thee//
u be PG for positivly Gang banged out//
bitch u fantasize about my cock in ur mouth//
prolly cause ur bitch given u a wicked stench of trout//
thats half the reason ur sexuality is in doubt//
the other half is for u to figure out//

ez i swear u a "prophit" ur banner "proclaimed my return"//
from rapdis.com to rapbattles is a turn//
like switching record labels and watching the other one burn//
its time for some audio fo show, we need to let off this text get on a mic and flow//
im rated R for my corrosive talk, words seep through u at the speed of mac //
you'll be served and then severed like u lined in obtopsy chalk//
like a crime scene with no evidence, its all obscene the way u spit all errotic//
you call ur self catastropy but really im the one whos catastrophic//
ready to plot shit, while my mind turns more sick then a fucken priest turnen gothic//
fag tactics be underhand, cat lookin for a whore of a man to spend a quik grand//
This guy looken for a quik night of lust with ja to bust to try to expand //
hahahaha dumb rook u prolly dont even understand//
insult ma man again..... heavy weight's got backbone//
u got flexibility when u bend and tend to take it in the rear-end//
so stop trying to play pretend, you aint hard ..... like ur name defined catastrophy's at the end//
so at this point some advice ill lend//
come with the unique speach and pretend//
that ur words and thoughts you can bend//
u gotta make sure ur lyrics have a real message to send//
rapbattles states im a rook and thats a diss, cause i got rhymes flowen out my head like i gotta piss//
youd get squished back in the the days of rapdis//
back in the day where me and e.z used to rhyme with niggas like jadakiss//
your thoughts are a bliss, i could rhyme non stop into a stormy lyrical twist of an abyss//
e.z i know this was ur battle... so u can have round two, cause im only looken for an assist//
so hiss at this cat bout ne thing that i missed//