this is the omega of my supersonic boom
unleash plague to those unwilling to accept
ultrasonic, penetrating bitches wombs
rocking babies till their minds leak and pour out death
my anger'll swarm the planet in pitch black words
Im tearing hiph hop from the acidic grasp of rich wack herbs
my soul is just ice though justice knows not the crevices of my heart
hold cold steel to my temple, i feel the chill my body begins to fall apart
what the FUCK am i sayin? this is ridiculous ridicule if you must
im just in that state of mind of crime dining on the opposite of trust
im thirstin for power like nars, man marksmen trouble my dreams
sweet assasination, pigeons flying over my dead body
so it didnt rhyme? this is the essence picture this scene golden
ninja turtles lying on my nightstand, bloody from a day on the courts
weed wrapping its power around my thoughts i need support
i take refuge in the bathtub, sheets covering the drain
a pillow hiding a faucet with my pen and pad it rains
i gander outside my house out of the side window from my guardian of the storm
my mental and body exauhsted i exit my crib worn
my older brother's pet snake hisses as i exlaim shut the fuck up, i'll feed him in the mornin
blunted off of reality the score is correct as i push the weights to the corner
but who the fuck cares, insignifacance riddles so peep tired
as i make love to the hum of my new sega genesis i pick up off the floor street fighter

1luv.

Whoa...getting slept seriously, elevation is key, 1luv.

nobody has any views? oh well, elevation is key, 1luv.

lol and this was one of my better joints, idk what the problem is....1luv.

Not to bad, i dident really get the topic but the flow wasent to bad

my soul is just ice though justice knows not the crevices of my heart
hold cold steel to my temple, i feel the chill my body begins to fall apart

^very nice line right there...

i think you could of worked on your ryme scheme a little and focus on one topic..but overall not to shabby

im sorry your gettin slept on, i feel ya pain

peace

^thanks for the reply and to all, it is about my struggle and the beaty in pain, 1luv.

um final elevation, little dissapointing, 1luv.

whoa damn lol im used to seein garbage poems alot but um mad vocabulary very lyrical pz i gotta finish reading tho lol but i have to sign off first ill reply again when i sign back on

i gander outside my house out of the side window from my guardian of the storm
my mental and body exauhsted i exit my crib worn



say whhhhhhhhhhaaa lol nice ness yo the content was fire ill topic the title threw me off a little bit but it fits well with the poem i figured after iread

^lol thanks a lot, i didnt even realize u replied again so i guess elevation is key, 1luv.

man I don't understand why this shit is getting slept on
mad probs homie... you always come so tight when it comes down to bringin a message and flowin well together
I swear, keep droppin, ya shit is very much appreciated!

resp

..Getting slept on..LOL...I don't see why..this is a great piece..your vocab excelled in this piece..and story telling was also there..you did a great job...looking forward to your next piece..