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Topic:Suicidal Thoughts

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Aight. Check this:

Sometimes I wonder if there's life after death/
After I die, when I take my last breathe/
All the lives that I ended just for my enjoyment/
Should I just end my life because of my current unemployment/
I got the mack in my hand, my my finger on the trigga/
Is this the only way out, for a straight evil nigga/
Before I die, I know one thing has entered my mind/
I'm takin' everyone with me, all of my own kind/
My hands are soaked warm with the blood of others mothers/
My eyes are full of tears from the deaths of my brothers/
Got a razor to my wrist, with the slightest twitch my skin's rippen/
My blood leaks out like a fountain, as I feal my life slippin'/
As I draw my last breath all I can do is sigh/
Why me, at the age thirteen, why couldn't Decimal die/

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The Madman

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Coo Kid...My Turn

E'yo..
Thoughts Of Finshing My legacy..haunt my mentality
Guns,drugs,Stress,relationships..are all causes of Brutality
Shall I Perish My Soul From..tha Earths Surface?
Or Shall I have tha Earths Surface..Leave my Soul to Perish?
Visted Docters Many Times..A Therapist Won’t Do
Inside My Patience Is Making my Heart More Delicate then Tofu
Parents Died,Wifes Left,..and My Lifes Tarnished
Depression Hits Me Like Bullets..just Less Harmless
Should I Jump off a Cliff…Drug Myself to Death?
Or Shall I Run..Till Tha Beats Painfully Clump my Chest?
Many Times I Think of..Stabbing My self in Tha Stomach
h I’ll Live and B described as Crazy like most people who have dun it
These Thoughts Run My Mind..Everytime I approach Mistakes
I Will fall careless and Bravely..When my Lifes at Stake

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1st Up...............^^^^.................Votes Please............................................ .................................................. ....

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Can Ya'LL PLEASE VOTE.............................................. .................................................. ................up #2.........

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I think i'm going to go with madman on this one..

Both were pretty even.. tie structure tie vocab BUT Madman had wayyyyyyy more feeling in it.. I actually got into it in his.. his was very very deep while Decimals wasn't bad.. but wasn't easy to get into.

So vote: Madman

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Damn it This Site is Exactly Like tha Othas when it comes to Voting....Can ya Please take tha Time to vote please................So i can move on to otha battles...

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madman approached the topic better and his shit was nice it flowed well and everything minor errors.Decimal couple errors didnt rhyme well which messed up ur flow.

Vote:Madman

^^^i voted already can u vote on dis its 2-1 me

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=101672

emotion was more towards decimal
wordplay was probably to madman
i felt that the imagery came more from decimal
u both emphasized this topic to the fullest
but i slightly think decimal got this on suicidal thoughts

overall good to read wish it was a better topic though

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None of em are up on suicidal thoughts more than me... but Ima hafta go wit madman on this shit... his approach towards tha suicidal thoughts was a lil bit better. Not by much but it was. And both had mad vocab and wordplay. But Madman gets this. VOTE - Madman

Good Looks Peeps.....this is up # 5 ...........Tha Last One...............Can ya'll Please Vote.............................................. .................................................. .......

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Madman
A slightly less complex script..but alot of emotion.
Like Token concluded, it was easy to 'get in to'..
Your wordplay was your strong point..it's ok.
Overall above average..

Decimal
Your verse may appear better, the caps look impressive..
But really aren't..you had the upper hand..
When it came to vocabulairy & multie's..
Your imagery was quite equal to Madman's..
Overall Average..

vote:Madman


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