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{A Glimpse} Part One. - FormulaMC

(Verse 1)
I'm livin life to the fullest cuz tomorrow it could be my last
anxiously waitin fo 2morrow wishin 2day would go by fast
I wanna see what tha next day brings for J, heaven or hell
I'm breaking down doors, about to leave its eleven farewell
I'm that type who takes tha bus to tha mall starin at a bitch
to strike that attitude, start tha game gotta hit her with pitch
something hard but nice, Foul Ball! for saying I am not rich
pimpin is wat I do for a living like how these hustlers hustle
and how fat people excerise to burn n' gain some muscles
when I'm with a chick and her sibling I act kind of fatherly
tha hate from these jealous ass niggaz never bother me
took tha hate, they're stabbin me with a little plastic knife
I'm still searching fo my ideal woman near or far my wife
gotta stay pimping while taking tha hate its tha way of life

(hook)
mami said she doesn't like a nigga's attitude cuz I carry you
cuz you lied, in this rap shit I'm underrated like Larry Hughes
I keep switchin up my style cuz these bums are gettin closer
my life is getting kind of better instead of lookin more grosser
Jay-z sample-------->"That's right it's wicked, that's life I live it"
Jay-Z sample--->"I'm trying to live it to the limit and love it a lot"
its tha way of life

(Verse 2)
a nigga got what he wanted but didn't steal on a regular basis
teeth kind of fucked up, nice smile wit tha result of no braces
I'm gettin around in my homestate now going different places
mostly in PG seein some familiar faces, tha J's I kept it laced
still learnin tha games of tha streets gaining some knowledge
I'm tryna ride on some 20's before I head to florida for college
once I get a J.O.B, I'm a save sum green up fo my mercedes
momma keeps telling me about these different types of ladies
don't wanna shatter my dreams early by bringing back babies
but that doesn't mean I'm a not fuck a bitch, this nigga's down
if I'm falling into a terrible situation, I'll notice and try to rebound
myself off tha glass cuz I don't wanna fall into tha wrong hands
I live my own life can't nobody change it I hope you understand
its tha way of life

(hook)

(Verse 3)
can't see a black man's sins cuz they're covered by my dark skin
I'm chillin, turned off my mind don't want it runnin my life is parkin
fuck hustlin, I'm either chillin at a party or sleeping during tha night
or still awake writing a dope rhyme you can see my bedroom light
YJ blazes whenever, I study less sleep more and get good grades
my life looks a bit brighter, so no mo holding up tha ace of spades
like they say death is tha easy way out!, death is YJ's final request
for every moment I live and every new people I meet I feel blessed
15 years is a long way in life, I wonder who would of ever guessed
I'd make it this far after so many encounters wit tha angel of death
I'm pimpin, I'm blazin, sleepin, I'm rappin and I'm luvin this lifestyle
I'm that kid who never shows his happy side, I frown I rarely smile
its tha way of life

(hook)

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This Was A Pretty Good Piece For A Startin' Out Newbie.Structure Can Use Some Major Work,Try To Use Some More Multis.

^^Diden't Rhyme^^
Plus You Using Quotes That Other Rappers Have Said Seems A Little Herbish & Gay Cause You Can't Come Up With Your Own Lryics To Fill In Those Extra Lines.
6.5/10

I think this was a drop was descent.... Even without the use of multies..... The flow was very good.....

To make this drop better, use some better wordplay... The guy above gave good advice

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Mystic (Traitor)

Ok ima be honest.
I didnt like this.
The Hook was garbage

The flow was sketchy
Vocab was pretty bad
Structure was solid tho...

Concept is kinda played..
but keep elevatin ull get ur style soon.

pz

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My people skills are way better then yours, nigga..

i agree you need work...but you kept on topic... the flowdid fall in places..and so did the rhyming...work on complexity....few multis n metas n shit....vocab also..you got alot of 1-2 syllable words in there......but still an ok read...jus work on it....pZ

thanx fo da advice uppin

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yo i thought it was hot, i might b da only 1
but i liked da piece, maybe because i usually
read dese post wit a Pac beat in my head and
de can usually fit wit anything, lol
but ya i thought it was sick so
keep uppin an stay uppin
peace

an by da way puttin samples in ya
hook isent gay if it fitz da peice an
bringz it 2gether like dis did

thats great, you said and explained it well, keep workin it out. nice how you had some philosophy in there. good job.

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thanx uppin

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uppin

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Yeah this was ok i thought.....your structure was good through out the piece......your flow in this was pretty good as well, it stayed on through out it, never really got off that much....try adding some more multies to this though...but keep at it.

yeh i liked this piece...which is weird from me u know cos i dont really like alot of tha stuff on this u know...i dont think it wud be burning up though...but still it was nice...nice flow to it

agree wit the nice structure, flow was decent but still could be improved wit a better hook.good effort tho

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