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5votes
no dk
no crew
no hate

you spit first...ill spit after you

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You faggot you thought i went aloft?
you are very soft
i should go and call you terry cloth
eat my dick whore
cuz that what you are
this faggot even gets kicked out of a gay bar
thought he was ill
you not even shit
thats why you wait till after i spit

ya wack...
compare ya rhymes to mold n i wouldnt know
had to spit some shit...i couldnt keep it cold
had ta heat things up...lyrically mind fucked
this kid said "weres the bird?" when i said "Duck!"
ripped in the last rd...i guess same in Rd.2
cuz u could be miles higher then me...
...i still be more elevated then u
spit wit wack lines..so ill decide to bit
blah blah blikity blar <-- even that cuz's fright
end this shit wit a killer bar...literally it killed u
now they aint gon be a rematch 3....
.........cuz ya literally died in rematch 2

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well.......lol
punches- CD
flo- CD
wordplay-CD
structure-CD(don't play that vet structure....lol)

well....thats all there was in this battle...it's obviouse CD seen this kid came weak an jus dropped garbage, but it was good enuff....Rabbit either elevate or quit.....maybe try an battle newbies......my vote- CD

easy merk for cd

punches - cd: hardly any thrown by b

multis - none: nobody had any

personals - none: ^read above

flow - cd: b's was a lil off

structure: cd: b's was...ehh

overall - cd

easy merk...

p'z

v - cd

cd got this in every damn aspect this is like arm wrestilg a prosthetis limb no real challenege.....................................

You faggot you thought i went aloft?
you are very soft
i should go and call you terry cloth
eat my dick whore
cuz that what you are
this faggot even gets kicked out of a gay bar
thought he was ill
you not even shit
thats why you wait till after i spit
eh.... flows poorly, simple rhymes, poor structure... Lackin PUnches. stuff like "you are very soft" "this faggot even gets kicked out of a gay bar" isn't really punches, and isn't effective in a battle. You need to elevate, that's all. Stay up.

ya wack...
compare ya rhymes to mold n i wouldnt know
had to spit some shit...i couldnt keep it cold
had ta heat things up...lyrically mind fucked
this kid said "weres the bird?" when i said "Duck!"
ripped in the last rd...i guess same in Rd.2
cuz u could be miles higher then me...
...i still be more elevated then u
spit wit wack lines..so ill decide to bit
blah blah blikity blar <-- even that cuz's fright
end this shit wit a killer bar...literally it killed u
now they aint gon be a rematch 3....
.........cuz ya literally died in rematch 2
Heh. Better structure. Your verse is just wittier... Nothin really great, but atleast You had better punches. "cuz u could be miles higher then me...
...i still be more elevated then u" Liked this one. . . Work on ya punches, some multies, and vocab. You used "literally" twice in the ending there... which came off sorta retarded. Nice Job overal, tho.


Vote: Celestial Dialect.... Better overall verse.... wittier, punches, just better.

Carson, you weren't far behind though, keep elevatin N maybe you'll get him in a 3rd round somewhere down the road

If ya could hit up this battle: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...18&pagenumber=1 it's be appreciated, thanks guys.

sorry about that... i posted on my bro's name... but use the explanation from above... p'z 100chars.

^ i dont need to work on my puches

and that miles high thing was played as fuck...newbies always do that so i just decided to try it and mock them

but im glad you liked it

and i just dropped garbage like carson said...this kid is wack

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onesided here
dont wanna go into too much detail
rabbit just needs to keep battlin....
not much else to say about your verse

CD...came vet style wit more punches and nice flow and structure
nothing that stood out
but for this one didnt really have too

no hate
keeb battlin rabbit<-------funny name

v/CD