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Old 01-11-04, 04:31 PM   #1
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real shit feel this

IP: BE92 BC4E

you dont like my shit you can bite my dick/
tight lyricyst whos real wit this feel this kid/
i rep minez bean-town real niggaz get beatdown/
beef wit me aint gonna be three rounds/
weak clowns catch the trey-pound/
spray or get sprayed down quicka than greyhounds/
what the fuck ya gotta say now lay down/
my click dont play around but still servin them junkies/
pump jums bust guns and stay hungry/
slumped some dont trust none when it come ta money/
so you can hate me or love me /
say my flow is shit but neva flush me/
bet that wouldnt likely happen/
yall couldnt touch the kid if you was micheal jackson/
too nice wit rappin call me J-wop the prophet/
the phantom of this hiphop opera shit /

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Old 01-11-04, 05:22 PM   #2
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i like the shit my dawg, good ryhme shceme, people gonna hate if you talk about yourself to much, but fuckem, do what cha do
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Old 01-11-04, 07:21 PM   #3
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This was alright.....structure in this could have been better i think...try keeping your lines around the same length so it helps the structure and flow of your pieces.....you had some ok multies try using better ones though....but overall this was ok....keep at it.
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