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Old 01-22-04, 02:38 AM   #1
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Turning Point - Feat. LM

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RB.Com's Father - 5 Minute Flex
Lulong - Drugs In America
Penskills - {Father & Son)

This is a song about a turning point in our lives that had a big impact... enjoy

[verse 1 - LM]
OK let me take you on a trip down memory lane
To the day that I felt unimaginable hurt + pain
I stepped off a plane to find out my uncle was dead
It was so unexpected, so many thoughts in my head
My heart bled, I was abroad, he'd been gone a week
I was devastated my future suddenly looked very bleak
Comfort I seeked and from my family friends it arrived
I couldnt understand it, all of a sudden he wasn't alive
A part of me died when I found out he had passed on
All of my will to live and succeed had disapeared, gone
With him, my personality shone, he was my steppin stone
But I know he suffers no more, I'm glad but I feel alone
When I used to phone you just to sit and talk I felt secure
But I'm a different person now, I'm more insecure......

[verse 2 - wogzta]
Way down my personal timeline, back in ninety-three
My family thirst for a flight, so they might be free
I was only six, I didn't understand the business
Goin' down in my homeland while my dad manned the trenches
Lookin' out my room window, I could see fields of dead folk
And a top view of a concentration camp, where leg's broke
Daily, my face brimmed with glee every week my dad mailed me
But he would never tell me exactly how horrible jail be
And it was probably for the best, and back then I yearned to know
But with the truth, comes the wish that you had never learnt it though
So if you only cherish one thing, make it the ones you love
Cos they could be gone anyday before the sun is up
I've never been a smoker, but I feel like burnin' joints at night
To help me deal, with these major turnin' points in life
Although it can let people relate, it puts too much to rest
... No good can come from a byproduct of death
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Old 01-22-04, 02:55 AM   #2
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i thought this was allright i think LM did well to start it off ...he had good flow and good structure goin and i think he had good vocab in his verse...good Verse Lm keep em droping man....wogzta you had a nice verse i liked your structure...and ya flow was really nice i liked it i havent much of your piece but this was good keep em dropen y'all......Could ya return the favour on my Open Mic Drop.....PeacE.....
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Old 01-22-04, 02:56 AM   #3
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yo i really felt this nice story telling by LM n wogzta flow was nice...this is a nice piece over all....can yall peep my shit called "on some real shit"
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Old 01-22-04, 05:31 AM   #4
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yea good piece. the flow was well worked and structure was amazing, you also had topic. good keystyle!!
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Old 01-22-04, 07:22 AM   #5
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i agree it was a good piece from both of you,flowed well and had a good topic,
but vocab was minimal

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Old 01-22-04, 08:52 AM   #6
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Wow....this turned out really well
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Old 01-22-04, 09:09 AM   #7
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yeah, i thought this was pretty good... LM kicked it off to a good start, with a good scheme going and equally good flow, carrting the ryhming nicely, and the message was nice and clear....
wogzta thought your verse was decent too, but the flow and rhyming wasnt as smooth, but it also stayed on topic nicely... all in all decent collab... return the favour....
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Old 01-22-04, 09:18 AM   #8
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very nice and touchin..
i'm learning alot fromm these verses
everything was nice...
jus didnt get exactly how it turnd ure life
reflectin to ure future..
but very nice none the less
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Old 01-22-04, 10:19 AM   #9
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..Very nice...LM had a very good start and Wogzta added a great ending...both of you guys had a great flow going on...content was just as good...but..I expect nothing less from LM....
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Old 01-22-04, 01:50 PM   #10
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^^I'll take that as a compliment.
Uppin...
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Old 01-22-04, 09:02 PM   #11
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^ lol.... uppin.... i'll answer some of the open mics you guys posted in return soon... peace
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Old 01-23-04, 06:58 AM   #12
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upping.....
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Old 01-23-04, 07:29 PM   #13
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upping.......
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Old 01-23-04, 07:37 PM   #14
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That was dope yo, nice drop.
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Old 01-24-04, 04:29 AM   #15
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^ thanks but more feedback could be used... upping
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