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01-22-04, 02:38 AM | #1 | ||||||
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Turning Point - Feat. LM
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Lulong - Drugs In America Penskills - {Father & Son) This is a song about a turning point in our lives that had a big impact... enjoy [verse 1 - LM] OK let me take you on a trip down memory lane To the day that I felt unimaginable hurt + pain I stepped off a plane to find out my uncle was dead It was so unexpected, so many thoughts in my head My heart bled, I was abroad, he'd been gone a week I was devastated my future suddenly looked very bleak Comfort I seeked and from my family friends it arrived I couldnt understand it, all of a sudden he wasn't alive A part of me died when I found out he had passed on All of my will to live and succeed had disapeared, gone With him, my personality shone, he was my steppin stone But I know he suffers no more, I'm glad but I feel alone When I used to phone you just to sit and talk I felt secure But I'm a different person now, I'm more insecure...... [verse 2 - wogzta] Way down my personal timeline, back in ninety-three My family thirst for a flight, so they might be free I was only six, I didn't understand the business Goin' down in my homeland while my dad manned the trenches Lookin' out my room window, I could see fields of dead folk And a top view of a concentration camp, where leg's broke Daily, my face brimmed with glee every week my dad mailed me But he would never tell me exactly how horrible jail be And it was probably for the best, and back then I yearned to know But with the truth, comes the wish that you had never learnt it though So if you only cherish one thing, make it the ones you love Cos they could be gone anyday before the sun is up I've never been a smoker, but I feel like burnin' joints at night To help me deal, with these major turnin' points in life Although it can let people relate, it puts too much to rest ... No good can come from a byproduct of death |
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01-22-04, 02:55 AM | #2 | ||||||
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i thought this was allright i think LM did well to start it off ...he had good flow and good structure goin and i think he had good vocab in his verse...good Verse Lm keep em droping man....wogzta you had a nice verse i liked your structure...and ya flow was really nice i liked it i havent much of your piece but this was good keep em dropen y'all......Could ya return the favour on my Open Mic Drop.....PeacE.....
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01-22-04, 02:56 AM | #3 | |||||||
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yo i really felt this nice story telling by LM n wogzta flow was nice...this is a nice piece over all....can yall peep my shit called "on some real shit"
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01-22-04, 05:31 AM | #4 | |||
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yea good piece. the flow was well worked and structure was amazing, you also had topic. good keystyle!!
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01-22-04, 07:22 AM | #5 | ||||
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i agree it was a good piece from both of you,flowed well and had a good topic,
but vocab was minimal vote on my battle http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108195 |
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01-22-04, 08:52 AM | #6 | |||||||
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Wow....this turned out really well
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01-22-04, 09:09 AM | #7 | |||||||
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yeah, i thought this was pretty good... LM kicked it off to a good start, with a good scheme going and equally good flow, carrting the ryhming nicely, and the message was nice and clear....
wogzta thought your verse was decent too, but the flow and rhyming wasnt as smooth, but it also stayed on topic nicely... all in all decent collab... return the favour.... |
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01-22-04, 09:18 AM | #8 | |||||||
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very nice and touchin..
i'm learning alot fromm these verses everything was nice... jus didnt get exactly how it turnd ure life reflectin to ure future.. but very nice none the less
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01-22-04, 10:19 AM | #9 | ||||
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..Very nice...LM had a very good start and Wogzta added a great ending...both of you guys had a great flow going on...content was just as good...but..I expect nothing less from LM....
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01-22-04, 01:50 PM | #10 | |||||||
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^^I'll take that as a compliment.
Uppin... |
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01-22-04, 09:02 PM | #11 | ||||||
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^ lol.... uppin.... i'll answer some of the open mics you guys posted in return soon... peace
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01-23-04, 06:58 AM | #12 | ||||||
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upping.....
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01-23-04, 07:29 PM | #13 | ||||||
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upping.......
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01-23-04, 07:37 PM | #14 | ||||||
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That was dope yo, nice drop.
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01-24-04, 04:29 AM | #15 | ||||||
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^ thanks but more feedback could be used... upping
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