were livin in world war 3
can't u see
were in world war 3

2day i saw sum lootin shootin n loadz of crimes
theres a lot of fuked up niggaz in this crazy times
theres shootin polutin in the streets
loadz of gangs givin out beats
till my niggaz die my niggaz won't cry
just shoot ya so dont u try
cnt u see its world war 3
not wid a country but gangs cnt u let ppl b3
this is a very bad country
only just trust me m8s to be loyal 2 me
neva o if they will stab me in da back
n leave without a trace and no track
but i must go on even tho i know tht

so cnt u see
this is world war 3
were livin in WW3

This was ok here...you need some elevation though.....the content was there but it wasnt as good as i thought it could be though....add some multies to this to make it more complex and a better read....try upping your vocab as well....but keep at it man.

good storyline, but its been done alot...and better....is that really what your life is like??? didn't seem like it to me.... rap about things you know.....it was decent....keep working at it.

Good subject but u need to make it more interestin. Throw some better vocab in with sum word play. Uve got a good startin point so keep at it elevate an cum bak with summet special.

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dope but was it betta dan my others shit
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I thought this was garbage...pure garbage...I hate it when fucks don't spell the words out...and your flow was wack..and wordplay was worse..if you don't like my feedbacks..well..fuck you!!!....