" I should of Been. "
" Writers Block "
" Can You Feel Me? "

................ How am I left out? I show intentions of Mass Appeal,
Peculiar mentions, like hearing fat kids passin meals...................
I consist of ultimate actions, as if I held calfs of steal......
3 Figures is in the kill, why only 2 is divided into a lifes cost....?
Similar to abandoned babies, asking why my cries are lost...
Am I considered lucky I am not seen, a mere shadow in a dream..
A vision, a corny scheme, a fucking book without a theme.........
Why am I stuck in a dictionary as a term without a mean....
A worm and no segments, I see no birth and yet my girl is pregnant..
What measurements should I proceed to succeed a rank on top...
Let the lord Rinse my fucking attire in red coating in a crips block...
And ask the lord has he forget his reasons for creating me on earth,
For I've been rated mistake, my own mother regrets my birth....
Left out and Isolated, whether quiet or wild.................
Why am I never seen, when I'm a fucking only child?

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damn that shit was heartfelt...a good peice...
dats a real concept...i enjoyed it...
the wordplay and vocab was good...
overall a dope peice...
just a bit short...but i prefer quality over quantity...
and this a example of that...

overall dope peice...Keep Spittin...

return the favor...check my battles in my sig...

yo homie..jus like smoke this drop was all emotion from the heart, the vocab was fire, the complexity n imagery was all there...no flaw..it may b short but jus like smoke said...prefer quality ova quaninty
Fav line:And ask the lord has he forget his reasons for creating me on earth,
For I've been rated mistake, my own mother regrets my birth....
shit was full of emotion^^

drop feedback on mine its called"my open mic reposted"

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Hello~~~~I actually like this piece...the lenght on this was not too long or not too short..and your flow was right on the money...I think your opening was the storngest point the rhyme...keep at it..peace..~Click my sig..dream or Reality...

This piece had a very good metaphorical word scheme.
Kept it’s flow had nice complexity in the beginning
And followed threw out.

My only critique is it was short.

Stay dropping nice scripts.

This was pretty nice, i think you mean to say middle child in the last line. but the topic was good, vocab- aite, the meta's were what really won me over in this piece..

Let the lord Rinse my fucking attire in red coating in a crips block...
REALLY feelin that line right ther. keep droppin 7/10

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