*lights dim...Fl0 walks on stage and grabs the mic*

FL~0~metry:
There I was…layin in the pavement, dead n grave-sent…
My soul lifted n shifted higher with my desire for living without consent…
My spine bent… a dent in my head, I was recollected from dead…
N reached the gates… stepped forward fearin hate for my sins with lead…
Found myself bein fed…after I ate my bread I sat maself down next to da crown…
Of the lord… n afta I bowed down I said n begged for mercy n peacefull sounds…
The lord sed…" r u done holdin the guns… r u ready'', I sed yes n a steady life begun..
Then everythin flashed…saw the sun…my world swirled around n I was stunned…
Took me a while…to file my thoughts… no pain there was none so I looked up…
Bright skies… sweet smells in da air…somewhere roses were near, felt a rush…
then look down n stared… coodnt believe what I found…I had four legs on da ground…
With hair, fur, a big nose and a jaw, I was reincarnated n saw maself bound as a hound…

*passes mic to daz...brushes off wackness..now let the heat began...*

Dazasta:
Astonished to see..a pondering me…Buddhism prevailed..
Life smothered with sin…down the stairway…I thought I reached hell..
It wasn’t well…how i rested and holy divinities interceded…
Soul took flight..among the others…the pack of souls..i lead it..
Bleeded…woe and agony…thoughts irrelevant…
Met..Every god available…all thought that I was hellish sent…
Relish this...emotion spent transformed to hearts…simile’s…
Saved by the love boat…but still flooded by life’s memories…
Eventually..spoken heavenly voices..turned me grieving…
Destined to travel backwards..the scale’s were found uneven…
Leaving…room for more…cheated joys search for escape…
Sentence is everlasting… long enough to question hate..
Its great..with shallow arms I encompass my fate…
Evildoers returned…reincarnated as a snake..

*crowd goes wild...lights go out V.O.T.S appears in lights on the curtains as they close*

__________________
<center>

Best Topical League On The Net:
The Lyceum

$400 IN CASH PRIZES!!!!

The Prizes:


1st Place: $250 and 2 round bye next season
2nd Place: $75 and 1 round bye next season
3rd Place: $25 and 5 votes next season
Best Record: $25 and 5 votes next season
Best Verse: $25 and 5 votes next season

Don't miss out on your chance to win big amounts of real cash! Just contact Celestial for more info!

</center>

yah mine was a little wack, havent written a verse in a while

feedback tho

Good.
(will edit real feedback in later)

uppin.....................someone? anyone?

__________________
<center>

Best Topical League On The Net:
The Lyceum

$400 IN CASH PRIZES!!!!

The Prizes:


1st Place: $250 and 2 round bye next season
2nd Place: $75 and 1 round bye next season
3rd Place: $25 and 5 votes next season
Best Record: $25 and 5 votes next season
Best Verse: $25 and 5 votes next season

Don't miss out on your chance to win big amounts of real cash! Just contact Celestial for more info!

</center>

Good Flow... Good Shit, fellin this, I liked the 2nd verse betta then the first... got me into reading it more, and was more clearer.. both verses was pretty good tho, keep at it.. oNe

this was a decent piece...daz's verse was a little better..better use of multis and scheme..not to take anything away from Flo~your shit was on poin too..nice work fellas..peace..

thanx alot for given feedback fellas, much appreciated, yah mine was a little off, but i thought it was pretty good considerin i havent written in a while, neway, thanx 4 tha feedback, more please

this piece was pretty good...like Flo said...he hasn't written in awhile and it shows but still decent work...dazasta came kinda lackluster in this one...his past few collabos were pretty good but this was one wasn't up to par with his past...I still see this as a pretty good though..keep doin your thing fellas

thanx man, i really appreciate the feedback, ts great when people dont sleep on shit, thanx man