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Old 01-27-04, 08:21 PM   #1
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Hangover subliminal, criminal antics dance this 12 step program
My focus long been towed, from totalitarian to the toejam
I cant stand for myopic concepts like paraplegic prophets
My conciouness toxic I think I had one too many shots of logic
Last night my plight amplifyied twice towards my dear
Steer fear towards the mirror concerns are closer than they appear
When I cheer on my memory bank despite the clout, I doubt
Wrong route sighted, heightened toasted for start’n to account
For missing children, I am one of the orphanage fortunate orchard kids
The ordinance left my coordinates proportionate to yesteryear's skids
Yes my dear Im home but it feels otherwise, I’ll colorized gray skys too
til they Resemble highs felt at times better than spy on spy double issues
Out of breath, got plenty of tissues now Im only rhyming out my eyelids
Face it, its tasteless but my taste buds stay by my side
When I ever start to hang I find I tend to glide and I take it all in
For a spin tilt a whirl within and then grin as I gather up the resin
Try to gain hold but all that i once knew to be true has faltered
I look behind the eyes, get faint and see my brain...forever altered
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Old 01-28-04, 02:49 AM   #2
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Uhh... this was really good...
Nice metas and wordplay
Very descriptive.... good drop man...
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Old 01-28-04, 03:44 AM   #3
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I liked this drop a lot, it sounded good in my head and the vocab you used had good imagry. Very nice, keep doing it.
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Old 01-29-04, 06:45 PM   #4
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thanks for the feedback

.........upp'n
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Old 02-02-04, 01:39 AM   #5
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Feed back!
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Old 02-04-04, 01:44 PM   #6
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Read this.............hoes
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Old 02-04-04, 01:49 PM   #7
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iight...

Liked this piece...

The flow was on... Structure was consistent and decent...

Really nice imagery... You used good and correct vocabulary for this piece to display the picture in peoples minds...

This was a nice topic aswell...

Good drop... Liked it...

Hit up my Open Mics in return...

Much appreciated... Thanks...

Pz...
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Old 02-04-04, 02:29 PM   #8
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Liked this Piece

Nice imagery
Read well
Good flow

Keep up the good work
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