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01-27-04, 08:21 PM | #1 | ||||||
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SS : Behind The Eyes
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Hangover subliminal, criminal antics dance this 12 step program
My focus long been towed, from totalitarian to the toejam I cant stand for myopic concepts like paraplegic prophets My conciouness toxic I think I had one too many shots of logic Last night my plight amplifyied twice towards my dear Steer fear towards the mirror concerns are closer than they appear When I cheer on my memory bank despite the clout, I doubt Wrong route sighted, heightened toasted for start’n to account For missing children, I am one of the orphanage fortunate orchard kids The ordinance left my coordinates proportionate to yesteryear's skids Yes my dear Im home but it feels otherwise, I’ll colorized gray skys too til they Resemble highs felt at times better than spy on spy double issues Out of breath, got plenty of tissues now Im only rhyming out my eyelids Face it, its tasteless but my taste buds stay by my side When I ever start to hang I find I tend to glide and I take it all in For a spin tilt a whirl within and then grin as I gather up the resin Try to gain hold but all that i once knew to be true has faltered I look behind the eyes, get faint and see my brain...forever altered |
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01-28-04, 02:49 AM | #2 | |||
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Uhh... this was really good...
Nice metas and wordplay Very descriptive.... good drop man... |
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01-28-04, 03:44 AM | #3 | |||||||
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I liked this drop a lot, it sounded good in my head and the vocab you used had good imagry. Very nice, keep doing it.
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01-29-04, 06:45 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 3236 2EB1
thanks for the feedback
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02-02-04, 01:39 AM | #5 | ||||||
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Feed back!
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02-04-04, 01:44 PM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: 7A52 73B1
Read this.............hoes
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02-04-04, 01:49 PM | #7 | ||||||
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IP: 40D6 EBC3
iight...
Liked this piece... The flow was on... Structure was consistent and decent... Really nice imagery... You used good and correct vocabulary for this piece to display the picture in peoples minds... This was a nice topic aswell... Good drop... Liked it... Hit up my Open Mics in return... Much appreciated... Thanks... Pz... |
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02-04-04, 02:29 PM | #8 | ||||||
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Liked this Piece
Nice imagery Read well Good flow Keep up the good work
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