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no hate vote etc..
blind spits in 1 hour or under

good luck

You and your mom breed like fucking rabbits,
fuc my mama and my nasty smokin habit,
Timeless you better pull your clip back,
cause before you know it your ass is goin' get smacked,
and man no one cares if your here to stay,
no one cares if you die today,
Yo you talking about pulling triggers,
and ripping flesh?,
while i pulls in figures,
and you act like the best?,
well look up, try to listen,
next time go out and make it your mission,
to right something good,
and watch who your dissin,
cause SylicoNs on the set,
and everyone better shut up and listen

great another rap battle newbie, who gonna start rhrimin wrong
your just another TIT to me, whose injected to be sylicon
I like ya advar very individual, its cernenly somthing to see
advars give a view of yaself, so I agree your a big pussy to me
This CUNT ,he's biting hes more of a burnt herb than blunt lighting
bitch still couldnt beat me, even though hes had a month pre writeing
silicon didn't drop lyrics like what I planned, -he-slacked-more.
Took me a while to find this thread, should be on the handicap-board
I can't stand-this-rap-whore .Never seen a man-get-slapped-more
Than this bitch so rich with wackness I wonder, Can-he-act-poor
Ya pore's spread and let the sweat give away ya emmotional status
I leave you stuck with this loss, like I was throwin' a cactus

Ohhh nice shit im gonna have to fuckin lucky a that a good as spit!

timeless took this...okay punches....personal....not to bad of wordplay for a newb...

sylicon-jus some advice...like i was told awhile back...if you wanna highten your lyrics and learn how to throw hard punches and personal...check out elite FL and ask some vets for help

vote...timeless

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2# thanks a lot uppin.................................

I can't vote because I dont have enough posts, but heres some feedback anyways.
FLOW- Both were alright, but timeless did a better job. Sylicon was decent although his shit kind of sounded like a run- on sentence at the end.
PUNCHES/PERSONALS- Timeless by far had better punches and personals. I liked the one about the avatar and the pre-writing. Sylicon needs to work on his punches,far too weak and a little simple. Also needs to use more personals, doesn't really do a good job of dissing on timeless.
ORIGINALITY- Timeless had some good lines, particularly the one dissing Sylicon's avatar.Overall not bad, although a few concepts were a little played out. As for Sylicon, he needs to try and be more creative. His lines weren't very original and the ideas were a little simple.

All in all, I felt that this one wasn't even close. While both had decent flow, timeless had stronger punches and had more personals. Sydicate needs to work on using more and stronger puches /personals. This to me was the deciding factor.. my vote goes to:
Timeless

Timeless:
Punch Lines:6/10
Structure:8/10
Vocab:5/10
Flow:8.5/10

Sylicon:
Punches:3/10 (it rhymed nice but was no real punch)
Structure:4/10 (try lengthening it)
Vocab:6.5/10
Flow:7/10


I have to say my "personal vote" goes to Timeless

Both had STRONG points!!! Work on them as well as weakness


JamesJr.

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110858

thanks for all the feedback, uppin...................

~4 uppin.................................please vote, i will return the favour

This was very one sided..........Sylicon your punches were weak an your lines seemed forced throughout......I mean you only get better with time so keep at it.....Timeless good job..........nice flow, good punches as well keep doing your thing.

Vote:Timeless

eazily one-sided......timeless took dis in every category...nice punches...nice flow.....n good structure
sylicon- weak punches....hardly any strait disses....wak verse......elevate.....
vote: timeless
(enuff said)

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