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Typical newb talkin mad shit to a vet. Pussied out ona pinkslips battle.
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This mad hatter foo thinks he is gonna beat me down
Sad thing is, he's gonna go home with a frown
I'm leery of lyric after he pussed out on a pink slip
I guess he was afraid he'd be forever limp dicked
He says he's the vet,
maybe, but I think he's all wet
this pre cum chumb better study up,
or his ego is gonna deflate just like his jockie cup
I'm gonna injure his pride
Lyric, you're gonna wish you'd died!

Freeza burn cause the shit you spits whack like your lines
If you spit like this Do I even need to fuckin try?
I asked for a pinkslip battle, but your ass pussied out
This was your answer Hehe whos the lil bitch now?
Fuckin bitch, Dun ever think you can fuck with me at all
My personals are low blows, but you dun have any balls
Cause I know ya a girl, form ya last battle, it was whack
My first line was enough to merk your whole fuckin act
The fuck you think you are, Jus anutha wannabe white bitch
Dun think that we're friends, cause like diareah your whack shit

This mad hatter foo thinks he is gonna beat me down
Sad thing is, he's gonna go home with a frown
^^weak opener...should be strong to start it off
I'm leery of lyric after he pussed out on a pink slip
I guess he was afraid he'd be forever limp dicked
^^abit played, put not bad personal
He says he's the vet,
maybe, but I think he's all wet
^^played, cos i used something similar before..lol..bad structure
this pre cum chumb better study up,
or his ego is gonna deflate just like his jockie cup
^^quite weak
I'm gonna injure his pride
Lyric, you're gonna wish you'd died!
^^weak, and too short... bad closer


Freeza burn cause the shit you spits whack like your lines
If you spit like this Do I even need to fuckin try?
^^ok personal
I asked for a pinkslip battle, but your ass pussied out
This was your answer Hehe whos the lil bitch now?
^^who dropped out??... but it was another ok personal, bit weak for a punch
Fuckin bitch, Dun ever think you can fuck with me at all
My personals are low blows, but you dun have any balls
^^funny punch... not bad
Cause I know ya a girl, form ya last battle, it was whack
My first line was enough to merk your whole fuckin act
^^a bit played, but not a bad punch
The fuck you think you are, Jus anutha wannabe white bitch
Dun think that we're friends, cause like diareah your whack shit
^^again quite funny... average closer


all in all lyric's verse was harder hittin and the flow and structure made it an easier,,, althought mainly its the punches i vote on...so...vote=lyric

Lyric won this battle hands down.....
Flow, punches, structure...everything
was much better by the man called Lyric

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This mad hatter foo thinks he is gonna beat me down
Sad thing is, he's gonna go home with a frown
I'm leery of lyric after he pussed out on a pink slip
I guess he was afraid he'd be forever limp dicked
He says he's the vet,
maybe, but I think he's all wet
this pre cum chumb better study up,
or his ego is gonna deflate just like his jockie cup
I'm gonna injure his pride
Lyric, you're gonna wish you'd died!

Freezapop

Flow- He flowed decent but the structure was messed up The last two
lines really fell off.
Punches/Personals- The few punches he had were played and weak. Used
a couple of personals, but they were also weak.
vocab-nothing special, basic.
creativity- Freeza didnt get very creative. Needs to dig deeper. Ideas were
played out

Freeza burn cause the shit you spits whack like your lines
If you spit like this Do I even need to fuckin try?
I asked for a pinkslip battle, but your ass pussied out
This was your answer Hehe whos the lil bitch now?
Fuckin bitch, Dun ever think you can fuck with me at all
My personals are low blows, but you dun have any balls
Cause I know ya a girl, form ya last battle, it was whack
My first line was enough to merk your whole fuckin act
The fuck you think you are, Jus anutha wannabe white bitch
Dun think that we're friends, cause like diareah your whack shit

Lyric

Flow- good flow and structure, carried well
Punches/Personals- good personals and decent punches. Liked the low-blows
line, and the Freeza's last battle line.
Vocab- nothing that special, but it worked because of the flow
creativity- not a bad job here. Punches were direct and the personals were
good.


I'd have to say that this battle was decided by
punches/ personals. Lyric's were more creative
and hit alot harder. Freeza' came too weak with
his punches/personals. He should also work on
his structure and creativity. I cant officially vote
(not enough posts) but my vote would go to: Lyric

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Thanks for the feedback....uppin #1

Uppin #2! please drop a vote in this battle!!!

yo lyric take dis...simple reason he waz beta by far...keep it up both of u's
v/lyric

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uppin 1

uppin 2.. please drop an honest vote here

I need not say much lyric got em
his punched and lyrics were obvoiusly better in this battle
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