Here is a couple slices from my book of shit, any replies would be dank.....


Tearing me to beleive what i see is what i gotta be
but your the joke smoking dope
hoping that when you smoke blunts u dont choke
callin hoes cashin doe driving through town lookin for some dro
cause i gotta get high while time stands by
makes my life seem dry, no lie, i can't die
im'a cheap talker, when you diss i'll leave it to my G's to beat up ya
fuck ya, its not worth my time to waste ya
cause ya a punk, i'll throw you down
with a dunk with ya head to the street
so feature me on yo magazine gimmie an interview
i'll take my time, than talk shit
i wont hit, but i'll take my dick shove it in your womens clit
man this shit gets sick like tits that flop around
sometimes my town so beat it hurts me
im a take the thee with 2 E's and stack it up till im'a G
you see i used to think dark and stay cloudy
now im changed this shit aint the same for me the game
made a sane man insane to the fullest inner part of my brain
im ready to enter this game and create a new frame for fame and
avoid goin back to lame, misunderstood.


next one.... real quick...


bring me back to when it started the shit was hard, mostly retarded
cause friends turn to drugs when you need um the hardest
i wanted to give in, give up, say fuck it, down a bottle and forget about it
smoke a chain, cause addicts were forcin me to kill my brain, but i try to stay sane, and ahead of the game, no choice in bein lame
i had a chance to change, but said fuck it, depression comes down on me pushin my head to the ground man im a fucking clown
my lyrics consist of 1 main thing, to change the world along with this industry
and be ready for the heavy force upon me

word of advise read your shit before you post it i'm mean spit or whatever this had no kind of flow it was more like one of those wild ass poems you here on open mic night at a jazz club, next thing is to get your vocab up this post was mad basic, you try to make it seem that you're gansta like but you said some shit in there that i wouldn't even say make your shit hot but just watch what the fuck you say and how you put it to a lyrical content. in other words just get better overall

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shut the fuck up

even if i stutter i'll still sh-sh-shit on you/ pun

dead in middle of little of little italy
little did we know that we riddle
some middle man who didn't do ditally/ pun

haha yupp, i know, thats why i keep spittin......... oh and its internal, i can make it rhyme

This wasn't all that good, the topic wasn't too good, come up with something nicer to spit about. Your flow was very elementary, might want to work on vocab and complexity.. Come stronger next time, I suggest you Elevate...

haha, like thats never been said, ELE-V-ATE, haha great advice bra, keep it comin