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Set Trip, Enjoy

Im Trying To Decide If Hip Hop Is For Me
Reach The Title Of Don, Or Fall Out The Family Tree
See To Me, These Rhymes Dont Mean Nuthin
Any Body Who Wants'em Still Aint Close Enuff To Touch'em
Got My Heart Pumpin, Standin Behind A Mic
But My Rhymes Are Backwards Me, Still In My Mind
So I Shake My Head, Till My Brain Falls On The Desk
Stab The Pencil Thru Its Chest, Like "You Write The Rest!!"
I Can Pull Him Out When Needed, Put Him Right Back
Sometimes He Rhymes Till We Destroy A Whole Track
Wind It Back, You Know I Aint Init For The Money
But One Day My Rhymes Will Sell Like Crack Or Sumthing
Or Maybee I Reach To High, I Fall And Miss
Then Still Have To Wait In Line Cuz I Aint On The List
I Still Cant Find The Line To Write A Decent Rhyme
When All I Do Is Smoke And Waste My Fuckin Time
Am I Hip Hop, Or A Fan Without A Plan Or Plot
Am I A Mouse Or A Man, Will I Use What I Got
Will I Blow Up Soon, Will - I - Make The Moves
Will I Make My Self A Fool? You Betta Stay Tuned

OOoo

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DejaVu
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DejaVu


Nawfik's Out, Back To Chi...........

waddup homie

not bad verse..
not spectacular either but i liked the way it was written
feeling you on the content

'So I Shake My Head, Till My Brain Falls On The Desk
Stab The Pencil Thru Its Chest, Like "You Write The Rest!!"
^best lines for me

flowed well etc bla blah..
seen you do beter but i take this was a key?

A Very Stonded Key

I Was So Damn Stoned And I Couldnt Quit Goin Thru The Lines In My Head SO I Wrote Them Down Thought It Flowed Pretty Well

Wattup Fgee - Yea Your Right, Ive Done Better...

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DejaVu
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DejaVu


Nawfik's Out, Back To Chi...........

some of the lines didnt rhyme, although the images you came up with in places were mad creative, i guess weed can help and hinder an emcee. i think you should add some multis and pick a creative topic to put that imagery or yours in.

keep writing

and peep my piece please, its called "the resurrection"

U Aint GOt A Midwest Accent Either

I Bet U Read It Like I-Ther Huh?

Naw Its All Good, It Was Honestly Something I Was Gunna Try Audio Just Wanted A Lil Exposure and What Not To See If It Goes Aight

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DejaVu
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DejaVu


Nawfik's Out, Back To Chi...........

This verse was ok. The flow was easy. Decent read. Topic was ok. It was about average. The only thing i'd say is rhyme scheme needs work in a couple parts. Besides that, it was cool. Keep droppin.

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