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02-11-04, 07:12 PM
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Chapter Three
IP: 40D6 EBC3
Nine months later.. She awoke in hospital.. Still didnt remember a thing
She was too happy.. As she looked down at her wedding ring She is in love.. An angel.. But she was impregnated by the devil So trusting.. Wouldnt have ever thought someone could sink to that level Dates are confused.. They think the baby is a occurance of their special night Devils spawn sleeps in the corner.. Chest rising and falling.. A beautiful sight Lightening strikes... The hellishness of this is torture.. He just longs to scream and shout The guilt is like an infection... ... Eating him from the inside out He cant live with his actions.. Seeing the baby thats his own Making it worse is the fact that... ... His brother and wife are in the unknown He stands atop the tower.. Rain beating the ground He screams aloud... ... Can no longer be confound Lightening strikes... Where it all started.. He was plunging into despair God gave up on him.. So there is no room for prayer The lovers.. Plunged deep into each others hearts Unknowing to the fact.. The Devil played his part The man.. Expels his last breathe with a yell Jumps off the building.. And plunges into hell |
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02-11-04, 07:17 PM
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Hmmm~~~very nicley written..you have done very well with this project...*Claps*...you have grown young`grasshopper~*Sighs*...I remember like it was just yesterday,when you dropped you first OM...although it was only about two weeks ago..anyway..this was a nice story...good job...^>^
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02-11-04, 07:18 PM
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Free..........nice story telling....i like this piece its imaginary u can picture it...nice project from Chap 1 to chap 3
Keep droppin ......
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02-11-04, 07:22 PM
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read all three,,very damn good this piece was excellent
but u have to read the other two for full understanding man..props on this...excellent...one of the best ive read in a while
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02-11-04, 08:30 PM
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EXCELLENCE AT ITS BEST... real
this whole scheme you doin is madd super nice... most def... i was feelin it each piece is better then each piece in its own unique way... i like them all feelin them all... whne your done... the whole project will be ledgended... for sure oh yeah... here's that piece i ment to drop yesterday ... http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...831#post1176831 ... i'm tellin you... its madd nice Caesar - On3
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02-12-04, 03:20 AM
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iight...
Thanks to all you^... Uppin for more... Pz... |
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02-12-04, 03:26 AM
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dope drop man. all three were real nice. the whole thing just came
together excellently. much propz on this. pretty much everything was of high quality. keep up the writing. fav. lines: Where it all started.. He was plunging into despair God gave up on him.. So there is no room for prayer ^tight hit mines up if you can. pz
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02-12-04, 04:33 AM
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aaaiiight....dis was a nice peace....u can see wots going on..good prodject...keep it up!!
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02-12-04, 11:24 AM
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This was a dope piece..........you finished it up with a great ending........i enjoyed reading every chapter that came.....The images were excellent....very interesting........If you had drop this in Poetic Scriptures you woulda definately (in my eyes) been in legends!!! Great Drop Free!!! Keep it up...........
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02-12-04, 12:18 PM
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Dope shit, yes you have grown to be quite the artist in your own right i admire somebody that can tell a story instead of doing 'i'm so ill i gave Aids Herpes (hey that was kinda dope shit i might use that!!!!!!!!!!)' type shit all the time. nice drop,
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02-12-04, 06:11 PM
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that was tight. i read all three. good idea....the last one (this one) was my favorite...i liked the end with the repitition of plunge in all the different ways. good job.
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02-13-04, 12:05 AM
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nice peice i didn't really understand it cuz i've haven't read all 3 but i plan 2 this part had nice imagery shit was almost like a movie and alternating parts with the man and woman was perfect
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02-13-04, 09:33 AM
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notice how if one person disses, then every does and if one person shows love, everyone does. It's a conspiracy. I think this was a nice story but you can't rap this..its a story and that's it.
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02-13-04, 12:34 PM
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Idiot...
It is a story... Its not meant to be rapped fool... You can post more than jus rap verses in OM herb... Uppin a guess... Pz... |
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02-13-04, 01:53 PM
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aight now I know why half of the stuff in here is identical to your stuff
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as his sweat pounded the ground and left burnt black marks on the path as he walked towards me with crimson-like skin and universal black horns and as he reached for my lifeless corpse a black-robed figure that was hard to discern whispered to me "Your days are numbered".
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