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killa kali:your opener was ayite, the last line made it good, and just a little humorous.
your punches were pretty good for the most part, a few were played , but they all hit pretty hard...your use of multiples could've been a little stronger, but they flowed ayite, no metaphors....you had some wordplay..nice touch with the curly" line ....your closer was structure nice, it flowed wel, and the punch hit prety hard as well..you can still improve though.....
lyrikal03:your opener wasn't bad, the structure was decent, but misspelling words is a no-no, also the punch was a little played..try being more creative. your punches weren't all there, they were played simple, and hit really soft, its like you weren't taking this battle seriously....you tried using multiples, but it didn't work out so well, you had no metaphors or wordplay...so on to the closer.......was just bad, it was so played, you need to build your vocab, and just battle a lot more....
vote:killa kali
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02-14-04, 03:13 AM
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