the top part looks like someone critiqued it and thenthe second part looks like you wrote it on your own...I wasnt feelin it cause is not my kind of rhym but it was okay

Nice drop gurl,
a strange topic, but i liked it

Inspiration u find in the strangest of places

^^^nice line, V.tru

likin it hun

-pz

nice, the ryhme scheme was a little sketchy but it worked, good topic too, keep it up
peace

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i was feelin this, strange way to see things but overall it was pretty good, heres my fav lines

I never lied, I don't wanna be victomized by suicide
inside my head I remembered your fingers around my throat the exact moment I was choked & 2 my surprize what I realized was on that night I had wished I had died.

i likes those, in the beginning it was confusing but it came together in the end, nice, please peep my new poem "i remember"

This was most intriguing...

...though i felt the way you used abbreviations and stuff like * * were not needed. I don't see the point of them. If for artistic purposes, then they didn't come off in this piece.


But yeah, a slightly abstract yet well put piece. Taking one through the ride of emotions in a chaotic yet effective way..

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Shiznit's Thoughts:

hmm...very nice...the beginning really started the artistic approach on the piece but as soon as it gets to end it messed up the parts that made it a bit confusing but still got for me to comprehend some views on it despite its imperfection

You used very nice vocabs and inspired words...i liked it

and yeah you could work on the ending but yeah that was just a suggestion but hey either way..its good

drop more gurl!

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miss fulloshit

another stolen poem from the same person. She must be flattered that you are such a fan you would steal at least two of her poems as well as her name and sig. dumbass.

Shark in the water.....stealin other peoples shit is not cool you untalented skank

What site did she get it from?

it was my work that was stolen & i post all over ezboard. i mean ALL over ezboard but heres some info Abram. now keep in mind on ezboard i post as 'venomiss' & 'mamacash' & everyone that knows me knows me by both names. i thank KMF & Wombbeater for pointing this out to the admins & i appreciate the admins quick response to the situation.