this is just the first part of my audio piece "Death is Lurking"
I'm looking for constructive feedback...

Death is Lurking
Styles P beat- My Life

Verse 1:
Down The road of death
Where the grim reaper is met
Head down, hood over, both hands are set
Send weaker pants of breathes
8 decades and 59 months
now I know….
The 9th wonder is death
And my chest…. More solidified
Than war kernel vets
Veins halts I my left atrium
The bells drop like a gymnasium
Its hard like titanium
Wicked thoughts within my cranium
My Death is Lurking
My eternal Bed is Emerging
My thoughts are Surging
Shall I leave in bliss
I hope Im missed
I got some last words
And it goes like this….

Chorus/Hook:
Oh No! I’m losing
Health! My family,
my friends, myself
when I die my spirit will belch
ill be right over ur shoulder… in stealth (See me?)







feedback.....

dont sleep...