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03-22-04, 06:00 PM | #1 | ||||||
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my first, constructive criticism plz??
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just sittin in english wishin i could win this/
without reliable wack practice/ i need to learn this mathmatics/ relax its just a test and i only request/ that you take the gun away from your head/ so you can try to walk a stray from your dread/ i cant stop thinking about equalibrium/ you cant stop freaking at that stupid **** you bum/ next time i meet you, i hope i dont see you geeked too/ so sit back and rewind/ this is my first and wont be re-rhymed |
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03-22-04, 06:20 PM | #2 | ||||
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IP: EFAC C9D0
that was tight.
keep that shit up and youll become ill as hell. try to have creativity in your punches. if ya dont know what i mean go and check out my shit on open mic. peace |
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03-22-04, 06:28 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: CBBD EEE6
thanks meh i wrote it in english haha(wack ass class) teacher so messed up
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03-22-04, 06:35 PM | #4 | ||||
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i feel you.
fuckin teachers are just fuckin takin up time check some of my shit on open mic |
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03-22-04, 06:59 PM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: CBBD EEE6
anyone else???
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03-22-04, 07:20 PM | #6 | ||||
....Trunks R 4 Bodies....
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that shit was good
but you could improve on the punches but all around it was good |
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03-22-04, 09:49 PM | #7 | ||||||
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thanks meh, i'm still workin on punches
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03-22-04, 10:08 PM | #8 | |||||||
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Nice shit, could be longer though, ill be on the lookout for more
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03-22-04, 10:14 PM | #9 | ||||||
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thanks i'm mostly puttin freestyles in the cypher(disses n weapons)
although i did write this one straight off the top of my head |
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03-22-04, 10:45 PM | #10 | ||||||
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