I think you mean inadequate feedback.......learn some English. And if that one had inadequate feedback, than so did D~Iller's. all he said was that he didn't like mine and he liked yours.......... no real explaination........

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flow - Krysis
punches - tie
opener - Krysis
finisher - enygma
fave line - u couldnt 'pack-shit' if i stuffed 'faeces' in ure pockets-
n u couldnt blow me up if u started spittin rockets- by Krysis

my vote goes to Krysis

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - strobe

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^^^
least he quoted a punch, lets u know he read the battle.....

up'n....

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BREAKDOWN

Originally posted by Enygma

This cat Came in Insultin, though his Game Is Revoltin//
His rhymes are full of shit.....even his Name Is In Colons//
not that good of a personal didnt make much sense.2/10
Lettin Two Spray, another loss...what would your Crew Say?//
Leave your head so full of 'Notts' people are askin.....'U.K?'//
Nice personal worked his location well.8/10
I'm Spittin Logic, while he just can't cope, This Kid's Retarded//
I gotta boot him in the head........just to Kick Some Knowledge//
Not that good could of been worded better. 2/10
I spit like Forty Five's......got you meetin Your Demise//
And feedin off my shit......just like a Swarm Of Flies//
Played spittin concept, decent second line. 4/10
Hit you like Infantry Regiments when you're Seekin Out Veterans//
RB indicted you for wackness... I'm just Leakin The Evidence//
better this was decent but could of been better.6/10

22/50 decnt but could of made punches better worded and more content.

Origanaly posted by :Krysis:

see ya name is straight by definition cuz how u wins a 'Mystery'-
see u could b micheal jackson but still not re-write 'History'--
Nice personal worked his name in a meta quite well. 7/10
dont get pissed-wit-me cuz ma shit comes out more 'crisperly'-
you couldnt be 'tight' if u was a 'chinese nun' an still not lost ya 'virginity'--
Good crisperly and chinese worked this well. 5/10
so ure enygmatic? u couldnt 'spray' if u was an 'automatic' u 'suck' like a 'vac-matic'-
this was kinda weak.2/10
u couldnt 'pack-shit' if i stuffed 'faeces' in ure pockets-
n u couldnt blow me up if u started spittin rockets-
Good could of been worded better but still good.5/10
see u must have a fascination with assasination cuz for chattin shit i'ma end ya whole life creation-
stretched to much didnt need that internal. 3/10
then i'll 'wrap'(rap) this shit up like mummyfication, leavin yo ass on perminant vacation--
Pretty good 6/10
you could mettamorphasize, shit u gone wish u was a cat cuz defeatin me gone take u at least 9 lives--
not that strong. 3/10
now theres a loss of weight cuz i just smashed another heavyweight-
aint no debate, when u stepped up to the plate u concealed ure own fate--
you just got lyrikally raped.....
Nice pretty good. 6/10
see battlin me is like fightin a heavy mobb, best keep ya day job cuz u'll get robbed--
now look at the situation, you just got cut down like dead plantation
ok not that hard hitting. 4/10

41/90 - win by more content but try not to stretch lines too much.


This battle wnt to kryo only because of more content and slightly better attributes although structure and flow for some parts were fuked.

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I'll poll my vote when i get 50 posts im on 40 or so now so soon.

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This cat Came in Insultin, though his Game Is Revoltin//
His rhymes are full of shit.....even his Name Is In Colons//
Lettin Two Spray, another loss...what would your Crew Say?//
Leave your head so full of 'Notts' people are askin.....'U.K?'//
I'm Spittin Logic, while he just can't cope, This Kid's Retarded//
I gotta boot him in the head........just to Kick Some Knowledge//
I spit like Forty Five's......got you meetin Your Demise//
And feedin off my shit......just like a Swarm Of Flies//
Hit you like Infantry Regiments when you're Seekin Out Veterans//
RB indicted you for wackness... I'm just Leakin The Evidence//

Aight.... not a bad verse... some attempts at wit. Only problem is that the rhyme scheme gets elementary in parts and the flow suffers in a few lines. Other than that not a bad verse. Get rid of the // however... it just takes away.

see ya name is straight by definition cuz how u wins a 'Mystery'-
see u could b micheal jackson but still not re-write 'History'--
dont get pissed-wit-me cuz ma shit comes out more 'crisperly'-
you couldnt be 'tight' if u was a 'chinese nun' an still not lost ya 'virginity'--
so ure enygmatic? u couldnt 'spray' if u was an 'automatic' u 'suck' like a 'vac-matic'-
u couldnt 'pack-shit' if i stuffed 'faeces' in ure pockets-
n u couldnt blow me up if u started spittin rockets-
see u must have a fascination with assasination cuz for chattin shit i'ma end ya whole life creation-
then i'll 'wrap'(rap) this shit up like mummyfication, leavin yo ass on perminant vacation--
you could mettamorphasize, shit u gone wish u was a cat cuz defeatin me gone take u at least 9 lives--
now theres a loss of weight cuz i just smashed another heavyweight-
aint no debate, when u stepped up to the plate u concealed ure own fate--
you just got lyrikally raped.....
see battlin me is like fightin a heavy mobb, best keep ya day job cuz u'll get robbed--
now look at the situation, you just got cut down like dead plantation

First off, DIE for explaining punches. Next.... wow that was a simple ass verse... Crisperly isnt a word by the way.... that shows a total lack of skill when you resort to making up words to keep up that simple ass rhyme scheme. I have no idea how you got a vote.... Seriously... you lacked wit and any decent punches.


Vote- Enygma

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I know that everyone is entitled to his or her own opinion but if you don't get the punches, don't vote. To explain the colon punch......his name has : around it.....:Krysis:.....also your colon is where your body stores feces before it is excremented out into the stinky pile that is otherwise known as Krysis's verse.....But thanks for the explained vote Hybrid...... first one of the battle....

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C'mon people, lets keep the votes comin

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enygma you got this....................

enygma: you was brilliant..good flow just a few basic lines ....good flow and good meta4s wit some good punchlines........i liked your wjole flow...see these are types of battles that we need...mo battles like this would give this site a betta name..all in all 8/10

Krisis: good flow just a lil to basic...could work on your structure a lil..to tell you the truth i thought you would be betta then this........but you got poteintial......would like to see you battle again...alll in all..7/10

vote=enygma

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Thanks for the feedback and the well explained vote......uppim for some more

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http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=121104

hit that up^^

check it

enygma opener was pretty sick nice flow good multies and nice personal the closer was decent i seen wha you was doin with it but people on this site dont know what it was and threw the rest of the verse the punchs and wordplay stayed consistent good mulites and personals as well good verse

krysis opener was nothin michael jackson shit should be thrown out period shit been used 987342008 times so it was below average opener the closer was closer was pretty weak to the first line was stretched even with mulites it didnt flow to well and the punchine didnt really connect had a few good personals and punchs threw your verse but i dont think you stayed as consistent with them as enygma

vote enygma

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^ even after it says if u dont understand dont vote


some people that are mods on here

Uppin for some votes......c'mon people, lets close this shit out....

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enygma:

"This cat Came in Insultin, though his Game Is Revoltin//
His rhymes are full of shit.....even his Name Is In Colons//
^^ill punch nice flow to it and personals hit hard 7/10
Lettin Two Spray, another loss...what would your Crew Say?//
Leave your head so full of 'Notts' people are askin.....'U.K?'//
^^another ill punch ..good wordplay and multies 8/10
I'm Spittin Logic, while he just can't cope, This Kid's Retarded//
I gotta boot him in the head........just to Kick Some Knowledge//
^^decent punch could have been better 6/10
I spit like Forty Five's......got you meetin Your Demise//
And feedin off my shit......just like a Swarm Of Flies//
^^wasnt feelin this one that much but it flowed good 6/10
Hit you like Infantry Regiments when you're Seekin Out Veterans//
RB indicted you for wackness... I'm just Leakin The Evidence//
^^good closer should have came harder 6/10

overall:33/50 good verse

:krysis:

"see ya name is straight by definition cuz how u wins a 'Mystery'-
see u could b micheal jackson but still not re-write 'History'--
^^ok opener could have been better 5/10
dont get pissed-wit-me cuz ma shit comes out more 'crisperly'-
you couldnt be 'tight' if u was a 'chinese nun' an still not lost ya 'virginity'--
^^is crisperly a word lol anyways ok not hard punch tho 4/10
so ure enygmatic? u couldnt 'spray' if u was an 'automatic' u 'suck' like a 'vac-matic'-
^^not good at all 1/10
u couldnt 'pack-shit' if i stuffed 'faeces' in ure pockets-
n u couldnt blow me up if u started spittin rockets-
^^probably your best nice shyt 7/10
see u must have a fascination with assasination cuz for chattin shit i'ma end ya whole life creation-
^^didnt flow to well ok punch 4/10
then i'll 'wrap'(rap) this shit up like mummyfication, leavin yo ass on perminant vacation--
^^another bar didnt flow too good but better than last line 5/10
you could mettamorphasize, shit u gone wish u was a cat cuz defeatin me gone take u at least 9 lives--
^^ mettamorphasize..is it a word? anyways nice bar lil stretched 4/10
now theres a loss of weight cuz i just smashed another heavyweight-
aint no debate, when u stepped up to the plate u concealed ure own fate--
you just got lyrikally raped.....
^^another stretched bar ok punch good flow 5/10
see battlin me is like fightin a heavy mobb, best keep ya day job cuz u'll get robbed--
now look at the situation, you just got cut down like dead plantation
^^not a good closer not a hard punch 4/10

overall: 39/90..expected you to come harder nice battle

vote: enygma his verse was better overall nice structure flow and punches/personals

~1~

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