10 - 15 lines
no dickridin
no crew votes
no hate votes


you spit first man

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This guy might aswell quite ahead cause he don't wanna find is head chizzeled off by a sharp heavy instrument lieing dead/ I rap deep i will roll your eyes and send you into a deep sleep, you keep fronting bitch next thing you know it my crew will be stomping/ I got a reaction thats the equivelent of a 100 army im gonna finish you fast watching you take the first punch tripping over my shoe lace, im here to embrase, and i bet you do wear braises and glasses/ I inflict wid reaction make you see things in 3rd person perspective, im a ryme master collective ready to drop beats that hit you like iraques nukes bombing/ Your lifes on a thine line whats the problem for me chopping it, slice you with a knife to calve you up like card board, put duck tape stetched all around you started to look like you were expanding, then start landing you with mighty fists pounding/ I'll flick you away like a rubberband elastic, make a fold and mold outta you smere on feilds./ i'll cough you up like a surliver thriving up, thats ready to launched to orbit in space, you land on mars, people thought you were a new specie/ You get laughed and literally scaraped your so poor the street owns you/

if your mind is so fine, how come you cant structure a line?/
before you even start think bout how you gonna resign/
takin it straight to fine mind, spit shit so hard it'll make ya go blind/
try some new shit and re-define, the way i put bitches out of mind/
that shits good enough for high school, when we were to young/
but come on dawg you honestly just a fool, still scared to hold a gun/
so if you wanna holla at fine mind, you must be one of his kind/
the sort that dont know whats goin on, still tryin to find his mind/
what you see is what you get nothin more nothin less/
im chillin smokin chronic while you chockin on stress/
thats it its done im out nothin more to guess/
fucked this guy up now his minds a mess/

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uppin for some HONEST votes help us get this shit sorted out.......

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Jay Dogg easily took that one...fine mind that structure and rhyming was wack...you need to seriously elevate. Jay Dogg this was easy for you but you need to come bette also. Your punches could have been harder. Nice flow though.

Rhymes:Jay Dogg
Structure:Jay Dogg
Punches: fine mind (he was a bit more creative)
multies: none

Overall: Jay Dogg

Vote on this link now peeps...I need to close this one (honest votes though)
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=120624

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thanx STriniBonafide all ya all gotta check out my battle with STriniBonafide and get some more votes on it

peace

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k i could barely read that Jay killed it with overall eveyrthing

Jay=6/10
Fine=3/10 work on structure and flow

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - strobe

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uppuin this for votes to get this shiznit finished

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FM you need to work on your personalz and you struckture and flow.
collective ready to drop beats that hit you like iraques nukes bombing/ Your lifes on a thine line whats the problem for me chopping it, slice you with a knife to calve you up like card board, put duck tape stetched all around you started to look like you were expanding, then start landing you with mighty fists pounding/ I'll flick you away like a rubberband elastic
^^^thiz iz where you really lost me

Jay Dogg came way harder on FM
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Vote Jay Dogg

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my vote goes 2 Jay Dogg cause he had personals,creativity,and a sic flow

UPPIN for some votes lets get this shit finished

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i pick jay_dogg be cause he has got skillz and hes good man woo woo jay_dogg

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Detroit what!!

aiight jay you took this one easily cause your flow and rimes where better but you need to work on changin up the rhyme scheme like this:if your mind is so fine, how come you cant structure a line?/
before you even start think bout how you gonna resign/
takin it straight to fine mind, spit shit so hard it'll make ya go blind/
try some new shit and re-define, the way i put bitches out of mind/

you rapped of the word fine about 4 times it gets tiresum besides that it was good

Fine mind you need to improve your stuff was just how can i say it not that good you can improve though also two suggestions, work on flow and work on rhyming because some of it didn't

my vote:Jay Dogg

uppin for some more votes to get this waste of time out of the way

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