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05-25-04, 10:03 AM | #1 | |||||||
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~ThE HOTTEST STORY COLLAB- EvEr~
IP: DB2C A475
Aight i did this story collab with one of ma homies on another site~/// give us some honest feed~
DEATH OF A BROTHER IN WAR Verse1-shadyrec =process of the shooting Verse2- Rumple= emotions after corpse is found to be soldiers brother ~ShadYrec~ I ain’t a bad ass but I clap that heat shit…it’s my faith and passion/ I get ~paid ta blast~ em so I attack cuz I’m a ~trained assassin~// I got a call from my homie who knows me well…said he was havin some ~problems~/ I told him I’d ~off him~…He told me 50 grand in my hand after I ~shot him~// I gotta get mine so when it came time I set up shop at tha top up ~on a roof~/ Ready ta blast…It aint that hard, I just spark at my target like I’m ~John Wilkes Booth~// Envisioning my mission ta hit him and kill him…Picturing tha victim ~fall and then drop~/ Time ta line up my sights…I gotta be precise with my rifle cuz one shots ~all that I got~// In tha chamber I got tha bullett loaded ready ta toast him…He’s ~fully exposed~/ I kill more than most so I put my finger around tha trigger and began ~pullin it close~// I’m ready ta let it blaze but all of a sudden an innocent bystander ~stepped in tha way~/ “STEP OUT THA WAY!”…I had to let up on tha lever and it ~crept back away~// I’m ready ta ~slay him~ and ~spray him~ but I couldn’t…I had to give way to ~patience~/ I’m in a haste… I only need a little space for tha assassination to take ~place in~// I need ta get this over with…I’m ready ta take away his ~identity~/ Tha bystander began to walk away, then he vacated tha ~vicinity~// Gun was locked and cocked ready ta drop him…”WAIT,WAIT,WAIT, ~SPARK IT NOW~/ I let away tha perfect shot in tha perfect spot…Next thang I know…~target down~// ~HOOK~ Assassination...that was tha plan/ A human life exchanged for cash in my hand/ leave tha target face down on tha land/ DAMN! how could I do this to my fam/. Rumple_Smoothspinn ~Astound as i turned the corpse around n profound that the man down was a brother……. murdered by me on the battle grounds//~ ~‘My brother’, I stuttered, now a corpse covered n blood in wars summer, feeling guilty knowing he was killed by a bullet n’ I was the gunner//~ ~Future was broadend n poisoned of this memory inside of me, as I question if this was a dream, but fuck it was actually reality//~ ~Identaty exposed, I arose n’ tried to control emotions tearing me down to the mud n blood flows, of my bro who was only born 17years ago//~ ~It was dark, but the rifle spark couldn’t enlighten the path to the target I was aimin towards, from opposite roof tops//~ ~Triggered now the bullet flew, through the air into my victim, adrenalin increased due to not knowing if I actually hitt n killed’em// ~Would he shoot back, no I heard the crack of ribs inverting into his upper body region, piercing lungs makin’em stop breathing//~ ~One member of family, I was drastically wishin I could simply turn back time, wishing it was me who got shot dead at enemy lines// ~looked at the corpse, lying in blood n mudd waters(waters), I was responsible for this, couldn’t handle it… bro im walkin with u through heavens doors…..Click// ~HOOK~ Assassination...that was tha plan/ A human life exchanged for cash in my hand/ leave tha target face down on tha land/ DAMN! how could I do this to my fam/. leave some detailed feedback please~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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05-25-04, 11:05 AM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: DB2C A475
Damn Yall always sleep this much>??~
~WaKe uP PeePs~
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05-25-04, 12:22 PM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: DB2C A475
DAMN!!!!!!!!!! WAKE THE FUCK UP!!! seriously.. this is hotter than any of that other shit i seen till now.. why u still sleepin???? Last time im uppin this shit.. ~~
~OUT~
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05-25-04, 12:52 PM | #4 | |||||
(00)O=(00) <-- I will knock you the fuck out........
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IP: B20F 67F7
pretty good it was long but definatley good.............................................. .............
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05-25-04, 02:25 PM | #5 | |||||||
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IP: DB2C A475
thanks for the feed man... UppIn~
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- -- -- -- -- -- -- - ~Fuck a signature~ - -- -- -- -- -- -- - I dunt play who the fuck is feelin this??/ Im the villain killin n' stellin just for da thrill of it/ The fellin of this adrenalin spillin is still da shit/(stellen- stealin, fellin - feeling) -Rumple_Smoothspinn~~ ~Stop hearts when i drop bars, with bullets leavin even Death with scars~ --Rumple_Smoothspinn~~ Net ReCoRd===== 19-0-8 rapbattle record== 1-0-1 |
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05-25-04, 02:38 PM | #6 | |||||||
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IP: 88EF 7D1B
agreed, pretty gd, a bit to long init, got a bit bored sat da end but gd shyt......Best colob ive seen for a bit ( But I wdnt say "da best" bit up ya self homeboi
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05-25-04, 03:43 PM | #7 | |||||||
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IP: D70D A460
Hooooootttt shit daawg! Yo, I was feelin dat shit from front to back, start to finish!! Great concept and good rhymes to go widdit too.
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06-01-04, 03:24 PM | #8 | |||||||
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IP: DB2C A475
uppina for the sleepers~
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- -- -- -- -- -- -- - ~Fuck a signature~ - -- -- -- -- -- -- - I dunt play who the fuck is feelin this??/ Im the villain killin n' stellin just for da thrill of it/ The fellin of this adrenalin spillin is still da shit/(stellen- stealin, fellin - feeling) -Rumple_Smoothspinn~~ ~Stop hearts when i drop bars, with bullets leavin even Death with scars~ --Rumple_Smoothspinn~~ Net ReCoRd===== 19-0-8 rapbattle record== 1-0-1 |
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06-01-04, 04:42 PM | #9 | |||
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IP: DB49 F2F2
it was alright, but it was a little stretched...
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