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06-01-04, 08:19 PM | #1 | ||||
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raindrops
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I come out pen and pad in shaking hands for a walk
And as I’m strolling slowly my brain starts to talk To me about emotions and how I’m feeling inside I have little pride and at one time my emotions died But this time I think my emotions are on an incline But I can’t forget all this distance, space, and time, so I’m Sitting writing as I’m chained to my burden in the park While my eyes try to focus as they contrast to the dark Asking god and myself questions like: why must we be apart? I’m tarring apart and it’s weighing heavily on my heart As I sit thinking so hard that I believe my brain stops The skies quickly part and cry hitting me with raindrops That are so profound it cleanses my brain as I reminisce About my precious miss and all of her beauty and bliss I then pen notes to tell myself I’m in this till the end my friend As my spent tears and the raindrops blend to make my ink bend Into the shape of a heart, so I’m telling you this is profound I’m glad it was you I found but ma I can’t always be around So save this and whenever you’re feeling down take a look And remember our hearts mesh together even in this poetry book. ...fin... |
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06-02-04, 07:36 AM | #2 | |||||||
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Its sweet, but what does it mean?
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06-02-04, 07:37 AM | #3 | |||||||
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Its sweet, but what does it mean?
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06-02-04, 11:53 AM | #4 | |||||
Guarenteed a positivie
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rain drops are falling on my head but that dosent mean my eyes will soon be turning red
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06-02-04, 03:45 PM | #5 | ||||
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good feed back uppin
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06-13-04, 02:20 PM | #6 | |||||
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yo i was feelin it good job nice flow to it~1~
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06-13-04, 08:29 PM | #7 | ||||||
Umm...Yeah
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nice I was feeling I liked your flow tha most tho Big Up To You.
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06-23-04, 01:23 AM | #8 | |||||||
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that's the illest poem i have ever written keep up the good work peace
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06-24-04, 10:09 AM | #9 | |||||
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you didn't wright it....uppin |
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06-24-04, 10:52 AM | #10 | ||||||
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nice one, keep it up
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06-29-04, 01:13 AM | #11 | ||||||
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Yo I'm feelin your poem son.Keep it up.
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