Give Me FeedBack On This Real Quicck If You Have The Time!!! Appriciate It!!

Spit lyrics made of steal that are real~explicit,
No mind of my own thats just~pesitmistic,

You must bluff to the eyes of the~opponent,
For it to become the reason why you diss~own~it,

And have your heart~ready, your mind~steady,

Life untill death we breathe, think and feel until we~bleed,
Feel death's breath, breathing tightly, in a fucking bullet vest, time to feed?

We already have been reconceived of fire, Lye awake in await the messhiah,!
Street rhyming and gun firing is apart of these wabbabee's~lifestyle,

They all want respect as a ghetto trooper and be hustlin,
But there aint pride in a life of misery with to much pain & mind~Strugglin

Feeling misplaced world of hate, you should be anywhere but here,
I spit a comment face is oblique, got u running checking urself and tryna show no~fear,
We play at high bidz the result here is your table side is all cleared,

Foolishness got you stepping foot on the street,
Street rhyming again, still havent learned? now i must show you what you hid from which is 'defeat?',

Your lines and rhymes need more persistences,
You aint got time to be fucking with resistances,

Time is flying, there is no denying, it's harsh but true i will eliminate you,
This has similar aspects of a chess game, cause it's all about moves and this is 'Check-Mate' ...!!!!!!

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ummm it wasnt that good but it was ok..

Thank You... For Responding... With Non-Sence..!! Lmfao 'Jokes' .. Appriciate The FeedBack.. Doe!!!!


Upppin 4 FeedBack.. I Know It Wasnt.. Nothing Great.. Just A Quiccky' ... So Holla Back.. And Tell Me What I Could Work On'..!!

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for a quick keystyle this was a nice drop....ya had some emotion and some nice
verses up in there...no doubt you couldve done better but nice drop girl

^^ Thank Ya Thank Ya.. Lmfao I Know I Could Have Done Better Just Was Bored...!! And Thought I Would Drop A Quick.. 'Something Something'.. lol !!

-Highly Appriciate The FeedBack... BabeBoi!!!.....

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i liked your rhymes but your drop seemed to lack an overall cohesion you had very good points but it is hard for me to understand the message that you are trying to deliver but i see potential so keeep on postin

^Appriciate The Constructiv Crtitsism..!!!!!!!!


-Uppin-

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for a quik keystyle this was nice....wasnt really a multi freestyle...but it was still good.. raw depth nice consistent flow...structure was choppy tho...decent verse...coulda been hotter....overall : 7.5/10

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RV's Only 3 Time Topical Tourney Champion

Nice linez, not very deep on emotionz but then, I took it as if we were having a 'casual' conversation during the day. Got a little 'loose' about 3/4 thru but seemed 2 hook bak up b4 end.... As you said tho...
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Upppin 4 FeedBack.. I Know It Wasnt.. Nothing Great.. Just A Quiccky' ... So Holla Back.. And Tell Me What I Could Work On'..!!
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So, I say it was a pretty good 'Quikie' that can now b 'cleaned up'. <G>

......Teazer.....



BTW, how about a favor on a serious one as I REALLY need to reach out to someone and could use some op's on my thoughtz/wordz. Appreciate even more if you ask for ur crew's review too. Thankz

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=129756

it was aight..no dout

pretty good but ummm you need to get the tong signatur back lol if you record an album and have nude pics in it youd sell over 3 million copies fo sho'

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^Joka!!


-Thanks For The FeedBack Though Ya'll.. .Much Appriciated

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That Was Nice

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Ya BiTch FA ShO!

id be nicer if we had pics of that bootay in a thong lol umm keep it up gurl do yo thang

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