aight well I dont know soo much about structure, punches etc..but if one of those raps were meant to be done on audio Id pick state capitols since it has more flow and rythm plus the rhymes are better and make more sense.
Don, yours werent bad either but some of the shit just sounded straight outta kindergarden

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Well, you said give an honest vote.. I feel that this was an ok battle..
Don came a little bit harder thouugh.. his punchlines were'nt all that good, yet he had a couple ok okay ones.. even though i didn't the bush line.. State Capitol's structure was good, but he didn't really come as hard as Don did to me, just tellin the truth...

V/Don

oh yea, return the favor in my battle

upppppppppppin this......................................

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yo i hear u pm'in ppl for votes wasup wit dis i can tell too not only cause i was told but those votes sounded like favors not honest votes and his verse would sound better on audio isnt an explanation u dumbass newb this is a battle its meant for dissin each other not makin music uppin

uppin dis battle

uppin.............................................

-Don.
think your Jordan and black...cause you rhyme about being shot...
like him you can retire and comeback but nobody'd notcie...cause you still wouldnt be hot...^^^his sig
average flow, good wordplay, decent punch
you can keep your title of president cause to you i am a God...
and you suck my dick like the presidential scandal... all your head does is nod...
average flow, good wordplay, played punch
you challenged my weak crew thinkin youll win...its your simple herb logic...
your entire Klass is only Sick...cause they caught herpes ridin DON's dick...^^^look at his sig again klass sicks
flow was coo, wordplay was good, punchlines played
i bomb this capitol like baghdad...leave you hidin in a hole and lonely...
everything you say...is more played than my stereo from SONY...
liked the flow, wordplay was good, aight punchline
when you said you'll win...you werent aware of what you were STATEing...
cause your Bush and I'm Kerry...Im bout to win this approval rating...
average flow, god wordplay, aight punchline


-Statecapitol.
Spit-Flames, Rip-Lames, Mer-Kin Don, From Dust Till-Dawn...........
Leave you dead on my front lawn, your rap status Is similar To Pawns......
good flow, weak wordplay, aight punch
your Highly Unknown, wore a du-rag and still couldn't get "waves".....
Murder You, Leave your cascatte next to your great grandma's Grave.......
coo flow, weak wordplay, weak punch
Kid Spits Wackness, Like Shaq's 3's you Need More Practice........
You Don't win, everything was given to you like a hollywood actress.......
liked the flow, punchline was good as was the wordplay
Blast-Nines, You Don't-shine, Like Black lights..........
Merk this kid quickly, have him on the First Flight.........
flows good, weak wordplay and no punch
Blast My Gats Right Through Your Grandma's Rockin' Chair.........
Through your Moms Apron, And it aint Stoppin There.......
coo flow, weak wordplay and punch


Overall, Don got this. State had the best line of the battle, but Don was more consistent with his punches. Seems like State's last 2 couplets were rushed. Aight battle. One of the better ones I've seen in the Front Lines. State had the flow. Work on consistency both of you. You both got potential in the league if either decides to go.


Vote - Don.

upppppppinnn....i will return the favour/...............

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punches i think state got it cos don kept talking about sucking his dick and so on,son it aint running u shud have changed speach a lil in ya punches...hope ya digs...as for the flows the both af 'em went well...i liked it....

vote :state capitol

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multies...don
flow...don
punches....don

must i say anymo?

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Leav feedbak on ma battlez an don't even think i kare bout winz maw fuka! : An' don't think i care bout ma record etha

I didnt pm people for votes!!...im the leader of my crew and i wouldnt put my battle on the line.......and i know the rules i am not a cheater like half these fuckers on here....uppin

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think your Jordan and black...cause you rhyme about being shot...
like him you can retire and comeback but nobody'd notcie...cause you still wouldnt be hot...^^^his sig
Good opener..nice punch 7.5/10
you can keep your title of president cause to you i am a God...
and you suck my dick like the presidential scandal... all your head does is nod...
lmao, i like that.."and you suck my dick like the presidential scandal... all your head does is nod..." nice..8.5/10
you challenged my weak crew thinkin youll win...its your simple herb logic...
your entire Klass is only Sick...cause they caught herpes ridin DON's dick...^^^look at his sig again klass sicks
Nah, weak..weak punch..coulda done betta off the name 'klas sicks" 5/10
i bomb this capitol like baghdad...leave you hidin in a hole and lonely...
everything you say...is more played than my stereo from SONY...
..weak damn..uh oh..the rest betta be nice..this was weak 4.5/10
when you said you'll win...you werent aware of what you were STATEing...
cause your Bush and I'm Kerry...Im bout to win this approval rating...
..weak..your done with the presidential shit..wack closer.. 5/10

comments: You were blazin hot when you was spittin' in the beginnin..then i kept on readin..ugly punchlines..ugly closer..you can say half was hot half was ass..

averaged: 6.1

Spit-Flames, Rip-Lames, Mer-Kin Don, From Dust Till-Dawn...........
Leave you dead on my front lawn, your rap status Is similar To Pawns......
Nice opener aswell..7.5/10
your Highly Unknown, wore a du-rag and still couldn't get "waves".....
Murder You, Leave your cascatte next to your great grandma's Grave.......
Wack..I liked the first part then U fucked up at the second 5/10
Kid Spits Wackness, Like Shaq's 3's you Need More Practice........
You Don't win, everything was given to you like a hollywood actress.......
The first line is played, the second line is iight 6/10
Blast-Nines, You Don't-shine, Like Black lights..........
Merk this kid quickly, have him on the First Flight.........
Wack..ain't like it..weak 5/10
Blast My Gats Right Through Your Grandma's Rockin' Chair.........
Through your Moms Apron, And it aint Stoppin There.......
Wack closer..ah man...5.5/10

comments: damn man..state i thought u had this battle..u can give any excuse you want but still..people can drop verses in 10 mins..i mean..u cant give any excuses on battles it just makes your shit look worse.

averaged: 5.8

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can yall vote on my current battle drop a honest and professional vote..
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=133085

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Mike Hawk is a wackass......

uppin.............................................