Ill made when I kick it// I feel like I got AIDs, Im so sick wit it// step into a world where you get swirled like twistas// you a misfit bitch like a groupie that dont lick dick// fuck a herb or mark, get served tha dark// turds and farts, beware when tha words spark// I shit on rappers wit atomic bombs// I give you scratches like Ron G, wit a mic in my palm// Im tha Don G, you jus a worthless soldier livin life by my psalms// you spit shit word, you spit shit like you chewin turds// and fuck ya chic, I hate a bitch, catch me blastin at ya bird//

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WHACK MUTHAFUCKAZ NEED TO KILL THA NOIZE....

yo check it

yo that was a cute little story...but the out come was a trajed'ee/
you got know punches kid...I think you should try some analagy's/
this guy on the kiddie lines...he freestyleling about farts and turds/
no one feelin your words ima beat you...so many times you thought it was on replay/
you homeless on rapbattles kiddo...but i might let you stay/
this man bought some four leaf clovers...but he still pushin his luck/
you beatin me in this battle...is like seeing j-z wit hockey stick and puck/
only way some one would feel you...is if they was born blind/
you cant handle my lines like your sig say...whack mc's like you should kill the noise/
get me a better mc cuase im not micheal jackson...i dont wanna play wit little boys/

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THIS WASNT HARD TO VOTE ON AT ALL.
BREAK DOWN
FLOW META
PUCHES META
PERSONALS META
HUMOUR META

TRAJED`EE.....THATS WAT YOUR VERSE WAS.
THAT STRUCTURES FUCKED UP AND THEIR WAS NO SKILL IN THAT DROP WHAT SO EVER.

VOTE META

FRAVE LINE
you cant handle my lines like your sig say...whack mc's like you should kill the noise/
get me a better mc cuase im not micheal jackson...i dont wanna play wit little boysVE LINE

thanks for the vote uppin

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This was pretty much a one sided battle. Trajed'ee i wasen't feelin' your flow your structure was off. need to elevate on ya vocab some and throw some harder punches' and personnals.

the metaphor wins this one with better flow and strucure. punches really didn't hit that hard but it was a better verse.


Return the favor...Need honest votes

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WHACK MUTHAFUCKAZ NEED TO KILL THA NOIZE....

ok:
Trajed'ee- your verse would have been better if you had structure that was readable, ur verse lacked hard punches and flow, it was like u just didnt give a shit....try to use personals too, not hate, just being honest
the metaphor-ok this was a lot better, flow and structure wise,nice play off his name and you had some funny disses.....you take this for an overall better verse, but u both need to come harder next time around.............not bad tho
VOTE:the metaphor

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Yo Meta Won Dat! Trajad'ee Ur Shit Were't And Da Punchlines Weren't
Hitting Da Point!



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