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GOOD LUCK MAN

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naw we goin 10/15

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waitin on u 2 agree then ima check in

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Ok 10 - 15 Lines..... Whatever....................

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I kill kids like you for a living, i slightly gone mad r-kelly
Let's face it... MY on-net career's lookin up...
....and yours is lookin up to me
I smash you like mirrors with J's face cast
your like a window in my rectum...
coz you a Payne(pain) in my ass
But I'm dropping you boy, like childs game of hot potato
Cuz the dopest thing you ever formed...
...came outta a can of Play-Doh.
your not religious? but you should now pray to jehova
coz this panzie didnt have a chance tho...
...like sunday mornings with the mower!!!
Didnt wanna check for 12 lines? even more lines for his diss
J your like armless kids at birthdays...
...you will never carry a gift!!
Another mcee flattened as i quickly fly-by
this battle is like rugby matchs won by kicks...
...because i didnt even try!!!

They all ready pre-warned you that im deadly like one of a Twisted Televangalist
Ya Heart.. is gettin Dissolved from Bars.. that resemble... ones from a Mechanic

Call me Arragent but my Perception is that neva have i witnessed any Competition
Deadly Lyrical Ambushes touched Front lines.. Newbie of the year.. my Nomination

Look Timeless my rhyme is "This" that your Bitchless Murder Graphical Scriptures
Vividly Paint my Pictures.10-0 "no mo"mr Time u will never Experience the Gifted

Please ya Verses you spittin to me come back.... with more holes than Swisscheese
Witness how carefully "Silence Timeless" not Tanya Hardin but i will take off ya Knees

Logically u will "C'. thats its Impossible for Me 2 lose Squables especially since im Tellin
Pussy Aroma from every bar Time has sent me ive been through more bars than a Felon

Neva get the Second Chance to Take the Upper Hand from the rhymes im Deliverin
Strictly Pride Tested Notice the Signature Basically like a seizure i will leave u Shiverin

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They all ready pre-warned you that im deadly like one of a Twisted Televangalist
Ya Heart.. is gettin Dissolved from Bars.. that resemble... ones from a Mechanic

Call me Arragent but my Perception is that neva have i witnessed any Competition
Deadly Lyrical Ambushes touched Front lines.. Newbie of the year.. my Nomination

Look Timeless my rhyme is "This" that your Bitchless Murder Graphical Scriptures
Vividly Paint my Pictures.10-0 "no mo"mr Time u will never Experience the Gifted

Please ya Verses you spittin to me come back.... with more holes than Swisscheese
Witness how carefully "Silence Timeless" not Tanya Hardin but i will take off ya Knees

Logically u will "C'. thats its Impossible for Me 2 lose Squables especially since im Tellin
Pussy Aroma from every bar Time has sent me ive been through more bars than a Felon

Neva get the Second Chance to Take the Upper Hand from the rhymes im Deliverin
Strictly Pride Tested Notice the Signature Basically like a seizure i will leave u Shiverin
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yo j that was hot b.. and timeless came atchu... this one's close u both on that same pedestal of hotness... but ima give it to j.. that's ma dawg.. i liked his punches a lil betta but props to both of ya.. stay up

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victims: poetic justice(5-1) ill-Grammatix(5-3)
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breakdown

flow- timeless
punches- j
structure- j
personal enjoyment- j
hardness- j
personals- nobody really ties

thats tha breakdown of ma vote

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ok:
timeless, you had the overall better verse here, you had good flow and structure, ya punches hit hard and you had some creative vocabulary in ya verse,good job....
trooper:your structure was good,but ya lines is stretched a bit, but you had a decent verse, i just dont think vocab wise you were better than your opponent, you need to come harder, and maybe use some personals in there as well...
VOTE:timeless

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Timeless: opener, was good, u had some alright punches, nuttin amazin...u had good flow throughout ur verse, and good structure..no personals...ok verse
6/10....

J: Ugly ass structure, do sumthin about that...u also had weak punches, ur lines were stretched, not good doggy.......
4/10...
v/timeless for an all around better verse..

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this battle sucked

but i was feelin j's more

timeless u didn't rap as much as u should
wen i read urs i wanted to stop

j u didn't do as well as u could of but urs was
more interesting than his

punches i give- j
structure and flow i give- timeless
vocab-j
personal enjoyment goest to- j

no hatin
v= J_trooper

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