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08-07-04, 12:03 AM
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chatter box vs Mimesis
IP: DC37 E31B
Topical Battle!
Rules: 20-50 Lines No Crew/Hate Votes No Recycling/Biting No Dickriding No Feeding Topic - On The Other Side Of The Door 50 Posts To Poll Vote Minimum posts to vote: 50 Check in by: 08-10-04 at 12:03 AM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
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08-07-04, 05:34 PM
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#2
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IP: 36C1 E27C
chatter box has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-07-04 05:34 PM.
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08-07-04, 11:09 PM
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#3
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IP: A549 F087
Mimesis has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-07-04 11:09 PM.
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08-09-04, 07:01 AM
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#4
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IP: 36C1 E27C
Topical battle
On my way home couldn’t wait to see my girl.. What I feel for her is more than anything else in the world.. I would by her anything from Ferraris to priceless pearls.. I would got to jail for her im prepared to deal out shells.. Pulling up to my house in the drive I see the c4 truck.. I sit their pondering for a moment rage hitting…what the fuck.. Out my car I get base ball bat in my hand I aint being taken for no mug.. Im guna smack this bitch out the sky like I plugged him in the main plug.. Out comes my door key turn and enter the house.. It all goes quiet all of sudden not a voice can be heard not even a mouse.. Then some whispering followed and shrieks of delight exiting from my girls mouth.. Like o dis shit good and I cant wait til chris goes down to the south.. Im thinking to my self this isn’t right ive done my all for her.. This c4 cunt is going down she my girl I really think I was in love with her.. As I walk towards the stairs I see two pairs of shoes a bra and a shirt.. Rage beginning to build this blad is guna get buried in the dirt.. Walking up the stairs missing out the 1st n the 3rd coz they creak.. I didn’t want this prick clocking on im guna get him by surprise and cut off his feet.. Bedroom drawing nearer bat im hand this wanks life is looking bleak.. Waiting by the door screams louder and louder tears in my eyes.. cant believe how much this hurts itll be better if this bitch dies.. my world is falling down like I got thunder and lightning on the inside.. this is guna go down now peeps the start of this guys demise.. all I can hear is jenna screaming I need it more, more this is it between me and her this is something I could never ignore.. hand reaching for the handle I don’t know exactly who’s behind the door.. im just hallucinating through rage all I can see is his dead body on the floor.. twist n turn door opens its now or never my whole world caves in at once.. everything that made me feel good inside destroyed by this cunt.. looking at my girl straight in the eye both their faces staring blunt.. I freeze due to the shock of them both naked, up comes the bat and this bitch got clumped.. I loved her more than ever but its opened my eyes showing things don’t last forever.. But I really thought we would be their til we grew old, 2 oldies together.. But this pain is like nothing I thought I would ever feel.. This is so weird its like the twin towers horrific and feels so surreal.. So this is to all us men out their we gotta keep on top or we all guna be in jail.. Fuck em n chuck em but make sure its us that decides to bail. |
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08-09-04, 05:14 PM
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#5
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IP: 36C1 E27C
upping on mimesis's verse as soon as poss mate goodluck
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i got a 6 ounce chain 5 ounce chaps// 200 pounds and a phone that flaps// boi got rude so he held a few slaps// i boxed him twice n he had to collapse// |
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08-10-04, 02:29 PM
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IP: 0390 B4B9
The Other Side Of The Door
-July 16, 1968-
Im drivin to school.. so i can continue slaving for graves.. but the clock isnt waiting
Im running late.. but theres yet another traffic build up due to the constant raining The cops are tellin everyone wasting their time.. water had flooded over the ridge But fuck waiting.. i decided it was in my best interest to go over the rickety bride As i pull my car up.. it didnt look stable at all... but i didnt have the time to slack But after i my car reached the middle of the bridge.. the boards started to crack I started back.. but it was to late for me.. as the car fell into the unescapable sea I did my best to breathe, but i could only get a few breaths..... it sucked for me I guess u could say i was lucky.. some fireman pulled me out.. treated me like an egg But as i made my first attempt to breathe.. i realized that i just couldnt move my legs I went to the ER.... in a nice way they said i should be thankful i hadnt drowned But their best doctor came in and said i had been paralyzed from my neck and down -July 16,1988-
20 years passed.. and its like paralyization has turned my mind into a thrashing bear
Cause everytime i seem to go outside.. all i recieve are peoples laughs and stares Everyday i ask where my life is goin.. but it seems pointless.. cause im all alone But i just want to be better again, so i take my wheelchair and head to my doctors home Hes been retired for 11 years, but i still go.. the number of patients he still sees, few But when i go.... i just come to ask the same question that i always seem to do He already knows im screwed.. but he also knows that i dont want to be ignored And after he sat down on the couch.. he said theres no way to fix the spinal cord That finally pushed me over the top.. 20 years, and still not a cure to be bought So i pulled a gun from my wheelchair and told me if he didnt fix me hed be shot He saw my breaking spot.. but he was tryin to be calm cause he didnt want to fight But i refused to lower my hand gun.. so instead he began to start to beg for his life I could tell he was right.. so i turned my gun on myself, i just wanted to end this war I knew it would be better for everyone.. if i went On The Other Side Of The Door -July 16, 2088-
The doctor i spoke of has rised on stage.. as he begins to look the crowd in their eyes As after i died he came out of retirment.. and now he is accepting the Nobel Prize As he prepares to start his speech.. he couldnt help but have tears roll down his cheeks When he told the whole audience our story, and how it lasted thousands of weeks His voice was weak.. he said his discovery of healing the spinal cord was the key But as he continued to break down in tears.. he dedicated everything he did to me So now as i sit in heaven, id like to think if i was still alive.. everything would be alright But as i figured out, on the Other Side Of The Door, for me.. was all just great light Though i do miss the doctor, all he tried to do for me.. and our friendly growth bust I still believe that me leavin the world.. was the best thing i could do for the both of us |
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08-10-04, 03:00 PM
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The Light
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IP: 5104 E24D
Voted For: Mimesis
wow.. i liked this topic alot.. i was really feeling this.. box: i felt you did an ok job.. your begging started you off really slow, ad thats bad for topicals or any battle.. you need to apture the attention right fromthe get go and jsut work on holding it.. i wasent quite feeling the way you went with this.. it seemed like a dr dre type gulty concience type thing you know ?.. but i mean good job on it any way.. i just didnt connect with it as much as i did with mems.. mem: i really liked this.. i liked the way you broke it down in different dates.. the way u took this was wuite original.. the nobel prize, becaus ehe was motivated to create a prcedure to correct paralysis.. that was really original in my eyes.. that was a great verse.. keep up the good work in your topicals.. vote: mem.. Good job to both of you tho
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08-10-04, 05:27 PM
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IP: 36C1 E27C
ive never done a topical before i dint know how to write it so i wrote it like it was a song i think i shuld be doing audios to tell the truth
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i got a 6 ounce chain 5 ounce chaps// 200 pounds and a phone that flaps// boi got rude so he held a few slaps// i boxed him twice n he had to collapse// |
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08-10-04, 05:31 PM
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IP: 36C1 E27C
is that what other side of the door means fuckin hell i thought u meant literally
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i got a 6 ounce chain 5 ounce chaps// 200 pounds and a phone that flaps// boi got rude so he held a few slaps// i boxed him twice n he had to collapse// |
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08-10-04, 06:51 PM
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the medicine man
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IP: BF45 37DB
Voted For: Mimesis
im feeling this topical more than any other, different styles but talent none the less chatter the only prob i had wit your is it reminded me of that nas song couple years back mim ya shit was very original both had depth and creativity both needed better struc, no biggie what seperates mims from your is originality but both ya keep elevating |
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08-10-04, 11:55 PM
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IP: D740 43E5
Uppin.
Leave a link and ill return the favor with an honest vote. |
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08-11-04, 12:41 AM
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STROBE's Favorite Rapper
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IP: 5671 DBDD
Voted For: Mimesis
ok chatter good drop i liked it but this nigga mem came too hard mem won in wordplay vocab flow struture and his originality is a 10/10 and thats what got him my vote chatter you dont need to elevate you good you just went up aganist a nigga whoa better good drops
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08-11-04, 03:36 PM
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you gotta hear me again
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IP: C5BC 4316
Voted For: Mimesis
ok i was a little cofused when i read the topic (it was more of a title then topic) but when i read minesis i understood what he meant. it was all nise and even flowed it was really good didn't like that there were different year and shit but my brithday is the 18 so yea. i didn't no where you were going!!! you were all over what the fuck is this?:Im guna smack this bitch out the sky like I plugged him in the main plug.. no don't try that shit. i lkied the beginning up to the 6 line then it all went down and even though it didn't hit bottom it was still wack you no my vote
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08-11-04, 08:26 PM
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Paris Hilton Gone Crip
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IP: 1EC4 9821
Voted For: Mimesis
chatter- I liked that you talked about your girl cheated on you and shit but it was too basic the first lines were like damn its hot but den on you just fucked up and it started to be like garbage on the real no hate you shouldve stayed how you was insted of fuckin up man I like that you talked like it just happened and shit mimesis- ok it was regular got borin but picked up near the end I like how you talked about death on the other side of the door and shit it was also good that you kept the dates lol 2088 nice lol but over all it was a lil bit betta den chatter so I gave it to you vote and by a close one mimesis
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