aight here we go

Chorus:

16 yearz 4 blocks 5 shots
10 convictions 10 bails 10 spots (on ma criminal record that is)
1 glock, 1000 tears ma mom cried
1 main man, and 40 homebouZ who died

Verse 1:

I was born in jersey, thats where i popped out ma moms pussy
i popped, outta there, and ma 1st words were im gettin some pussy
i was raised in hell wit crack heads, hoockers, and wangastas
maybe thats why i turned out, actin out all gangsta

At two i ma older sister caught one to the head
On my eyez but i was to young to realize she was dead
thats why ma mom raised me in fear
she tried to keep me safe all these 16 yearZ

At three off we go down to queens
to live wit pimps and fucking crack feens
raised up by ma neighbours, who just needed money
they have beaten me lots, thats why i walk funny

at four ma daddy took me to work wit him
to wash cars, and stay safe stain close to him
i remember those times he tried to keep me off
the streets so i dont fuck up and run off

Chorus:

16 yearz 4 blocks 5 shots
10 convictions 10 bails 10 spots
1 glock, 1000 tears ma mom cried
1 main man, and 40 homebouZ who died

Verse 2:

at five i was wit ma friends out on the street
i had to be home before six, after that heat
i remember gun shots and drive bys by our place
i remember the years i was afraid to show ma face

at six new home now nashville, tenessee
year of ma first hit, and ma first henessee
thats when i was taught how to survive
how to steal, kill, get high, and thrive

seven when i robbed ma first seven eleven
the first year i knew that i aint goin to heaven
the first year of school, a year of ma promise to ma
not to drop out, go and get a diploma

8 years after im born ma first fuckin conviction
for stabbin a man wit crack fuckin addiction
i was sellin ma dope when he tried to rob me out clean
ma mom postin a bail, hpin that i will stay clean

Chorus:

16 yearz 4 blocks 5 shots
10 convictions 10 bails 10 spots
1 glock, 1000 tears ma mom cried
1 main man, and 40 homebouZ who died

Verse 3:

at nine i was hittin off successfull shit
i stayed in school, sold ma dope, i was all that
cash money flow have let me get pussy
i was toughest at school, not like dem wussies

10 years i moved out of cash ville for good
so what i moved to a similar hood
now Calis my playground
and thats where im found

11 years old im still here in here somewhere
aint gettin respect, would sell dope, where?
i got seen by JR he has land me a hand
man he ma homeboy, fuck that he ma friend

down the line down at 12 now
im down wit jr we wanna get big, how?
still sellin the dope, still stealin for livin
and noone knew we were the ones theavin

Chorus:

16 yearz 4 blocks 5 shots
10 convictions 10 bails 10 spots
1 glock, 1000 tears ma mom cried
1 main man, and 40 homebouZ who died

Verse 4:

13 years old, and im expanding ma power
girls wantin me bad, doin it in the shower
got more then dope now i got a hook up
got ma first glock, learend how to look up (to people)

14 i was gettin respected, so was jr
we went through much shit, and thats just so far
we had our own block, we controlled couple people
but still even though we treated everyone equal

15 done wit games, its major leagues now
dope sellin, for big, husslin some shit now
a bunch of arests, a couple of bails
i learned usin a glock where other things fail

now im 16 and ive been to state pin correctional facility
for stabbin a nigga with a fuckin kitchen utility
i may be 16 but still tougher then most of yall
and i still realize that im bound to fall

Chorus:

16 yearz 4 blocks 5 shots
10 convictions 10 bails 10 spots
1 glock, 1000 tears ma mom cried
1 main man, and 40 homebouZ who died

PEACE.

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Its alright. I think you could fix the flow a little bit. Maybe you could use some multis in there too. Seemed poetic cuz the lines were all short and seemed like they were the same length. Also, try ta make rhymes that go together perfectly. Like..

"...most of yall."
"...chose to fall."

Get creative and shit. Rhymes like that please the reader cuz they flow well. Just a thought though. Good shit. Keep at it.

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thanks man, ma rhyming is still a work in progress, but nobody is prefect.

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Yo nice drop i was feeling it

Aggressive and possessive flow bound with pronouns
Go around from town to town giving them the low down
On how to live nice and still now give advice or a just reply
Prior minority now higher authority, I try rule the block
But some fool shot a glock

If You Dont Leave A Link To Were You Replied To And Start Reading The Rules I Will Close This Immediatly!!! I'm Fed Up.

READ RULES!!!

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Not quite legendary yet....

wuts up with the link masked i dont get it, and uppin, i read the rules and yah ma bad on some responses.

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uppin

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^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^Uppin

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hey man i thought it was dope holla and anser this was the storyline true?
flow 7/10
vocab 6/10
soryline 6/10
overall 6.5/10
good piece ???

yeah man i dont lie

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k then thats tight man

uppppppppppppppppin

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uppin

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