Pac turns brains to casserole wit-out the cereal bowls, using shells hotter then charcoal to crack ya manafolds.. .

hammers load as news cameras hit the scene, filming AK rounds and shells from M-16's tore out a splein.. .

spectaters gather'd then scatter'd as shells whisp past innocent bi-standers and dropped em faster then hank gathers as brains splattered.. .. .

Pac packs an eight pound so save ya tray pounds, cuz if its beef my dogs will come to ya hood on a bus like grey hounds.. .. .

i spray rounds, at day time inside of play grounds, so watch ya backs or get hit wit the fifth any day now.. .. .

i run wit tuff talkers, night stalkers in ya parking lots, ready to pop up and pop ya tops like a jack-in-the-box.. .. .

i got more crack in my pocket then darell strawberry, so im on the block quick, now im stackin doe like bill cosby playin wit pop sticks.. .. ..

you can catch me in the hood in front of a vacant house, so play tuff and try to stick me until you get this eight in ya mouth...

send eight through ya house, 3 of em hit the air conditioner, one killed a police commisioner, after the shell went through his scalp quicker then hair conditioner...

and when im not out dealing coke or smoking trees, im in a short stay hotel room gettin brains from ya neice, me and my mans fa ten a peice getting the bitch to swallow, and if her mans get involved then he gettin he wit hollows.. .. .

this is an everyday occurance in my day to day, but if its no change then im lucky if my life last from today to may, wish i was raised better then i would of learned to stay away, but instead, i learned how to duck "low" to keep them strays away.. ..


to be continued.. .. .. Pac

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^yea, you need to drop a link to a piece you left feedback in. Or else yo thread will be deleted. But still, I'll drop feedback:

Yea, this was a pretty nice drop. But the thing is this:
Yo structure might make people not read. Cuz I mean, it jus keeps on goin' and goin' wit one line. ya kno what I mean?
Try to make it like one line wit a word, and the second line rhymes wit the next word. And try to keep it like between 10-15 syllables. That helps me when I write. Jus count out the syllables, and make them be close toghether in value.

But as for the piece, it was nice. You had some nice rhymin' and flowin' goin' on. pretty good vocab. Overall nice job. Keep droppin' and elevatin'. pc

I give it a 8/10

Okay..

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=142578

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yea son it was hot and ya flow was good son and the verse wasnt that bad u probley could of done better but it was sick