Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 08-22-04 at 11:58 AM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

Invader_ZIM has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-19-04 12:00 PM.

Invader_ZIM has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-19-04 12:04 PM.

your names shitty to beggin wit''
i know all yr verses are rit''

your problems are phsycologicall''
yr scared so u hide in your follicel''

oh and follicel means cacoon''
just thought id tell ya''
ya know dont wanna over heat your brain so soon''

i dont wanna kil ya''
just let y aknow you were a some one''
till i drilled ya''

you rappin liek you got somethin to say''
well then say it bitch i aint got all day''

you act all tough, wut''
battle you? bitch your lucky i dont beet you up''

your quick to pick up that knife''
shit an di though u liked life''

here ill slow down and let you gather your lyrical sence''
oooo the supence, ya right and guandi was intence''

hey put the dictionary away''
we know u sux its ok''

you spittin liek you mad''
that whole verse and you didnt even land a jab''

i didnt wanna kill ya''
just harshly drill ya...but oh well

ProVerse has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-19-04 08:39 PM.

yo don't PM me on no bullshit no more
i dont even gotta come hard on dis boi....
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lyrics resemble a mistake, rhymes sound like a accident
you took losses as you're own, like you "patend" it
even ya disabled rhymes won't "insure" a "intrest" in your verse
"steering" your words to make dead lyrics "driven" like a "herse"
(herse used to carry caskets)
after me, it comes clear your not worthy,thats the only benifit
"invaded" rap, but still we "deport" you like mexican imagrants
only "negative" talk about your rap, so you're not "equal"
career in rap over before it began,like you died in a prequal
lanscapers even enabled to build a strait verse with your 'bars"
alian invaders star,couldn't (FOuR)m a good line on mars
(forth planet from the son)

*don't say explination is unnececery cuz
people always say
that some punches don't make sense*

thats my verse
~1~

uppin 4 votes on dis battle^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

boi u jus been murdered

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Voted For: ProVerse

HAHAHAH zim your verse was aight and verse your immagrint line was funnuy and you had great puncheszim yuo had som good punches
/v/= ProVerse AN HONEST VOTE

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DUn duN dUn.......

Yo pro vese id like ya to join the J4P crew we could have onea the illest sites one here

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DUn duN dUn.......

thanx 4 da votes^^^^

i wil return the favor if u vote
why?
cuz i get money if i vote ppl
so u know ima do it lol

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In my opinion i would have to vote for proverse the flow was a little better and the wordplay was also better, although it seemed like the punches and wordplay were all kind of the same in a sense but you definatly took this battle,

thanx 4 da feedback^^^^^^^^^^


and lyrical flows i couldnt return the favor cuz im not in elite
sorry

uppin for votes^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

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can any one help me by tellin me hwo my structure shoudl be cuz i don tget that part thanks ya nice feed back

uppin 4 votes

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