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........ ite ya got a faggot accent, but u made it work for you in this song.... decent... u went well to the beat u had and the story u told, u need to work on ya chorus and put some deeper bass in it and i'd really be able to get into the story, but also u kinda ended abruptly and with the word rug, not very cool. same wit ya chorus u had some weak vocab in that, if your ganna repeat it in ya chorus like that make it stand out wit sum flowin vocab. decent drop tho fo-real..... but enless u ganna go to a sad beat like that and wit a similar story, u should speed up your delivary so your accent isn't laughable- no hate, pretty decent.

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ok cool, cheers for the feed back
but u know english accents are much better than yanky accents right.....................good

uppin

Aiet. Aiet. Feedback --

Paro-plexity -- Watch out in the intro. Whispering's cool, but you're blowing into your mic and it's popping.

Your flow is aiet, it's laid back, but that's fine.

You beat is sick. if you made it -- props.

Here's what I don't get:

You're from the UK. You grew up in a different culture, rich with heritage and its own unique history.

So you bust your flow about typical topics -- isolation, being pissed off. That shit about "checking your brother and mother" is tight. But the rest of it is a bit generic.

Here's what I don't know: Who are you? As a rapper? As an artist? As an English cat busting flow? It's good you don't hide your accent, because that's real, and that's you.

But there's enough rappers kicking shit about the "typical stuff". More than enough. Fuck. Too many.


"Girl....." flanges in at the beginning, which is fine -- but don't muffle your vocals.

Again, here's another ode to fucking. I know you can do better -- that ain't a diss, but there's a million odes to fucking out there. Why bust another?


Here's your strength: You're a UK Citizen. Cats over here (North America) don't really have a fuckin' clue what life is like over there. I mean shit, you got Geri Halliwell and motherfuckin' Blur kid. Your candy is fucked up (Licorice and fuckin' sorbet powder? those fucked up flavoured puffs, you know what I'm talkin' about). Even your comics are tripped out (The Beano, Gnasher, all that shit). Dude, there's fuckin' _real_ castles and shit in your backyard. We gots White Castles and shit in our backyards.

We never see any of that over here. So educate us. How do you feel about the war? How the fuck does a Brit feel about what's goin on with Tony Blair? Enlighten us, homie.

You want to keep it real? That's real.

Keep flowing. Keep elevating. And stay up.


Peace,

Shafter