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Old 10-22-04, 03:31 PM   #1
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read and critique it.............

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it seems like
to sleep right
we must stay tight
cause if not i'm like dat cable channel up all night
bothered by street lights,
feelin' dat this life bites
earnin' my stripes in dis hell they call paradise
while dese average guys
take to lies the world advertise
they neeta read b'tween da lines
to get wats mis'd byda average eye
an' understand dat this golden format
of daily combat
contain niccas with fairly strong backs
thorough cats
and when da trials attack
we stay calm and relaxed
first we analyze then stragetize
leavin grow men battered guys
when da smoke clears
we be da team dats standin' wise
why?cause we abandon'd pride
left all our feelin's b'hin'
perfected the art of war,in a criminals mind
so to all who even think about crossin' dat line
let it be known ur only lookin' forwards to pine.
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Old 10-23-04, 08:34 AM   #2
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can i get some feedbak on this one peeps.
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Old 10-23-04, 08:49 AM   #3
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Gets kinda deep, I like it. I ain't really heard the word "bites" used in a rap before, but overall I liked the flow.
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Old 10-23-04, 10:25 AM   #4
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good lookin out.
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Old 11-18-04, 06:12 PM   #5
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Uppn For Feed.....................
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Old 11-18-04, 06:37 PM   #6
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[QUOTE=John Deere Mafia]I ain't really heard the word "bites" used in a rap beforeQUOTE]
haha its cuz ur a newb lol j/m.....no hate

umm it was good i felt some emotion in it but i think ya lines coulda been a lil longer but it was a good drop keep em comin fam....
peace~1
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Old 11-19-04, 08:30 AM   #7
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thx for the feedbak.uppppppppppppnnnnnnnnnnnn................
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Old 11-19-04, 09:28 AM   #8
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"to get wats mis'd byda average eye
an' understand dat this golden format
of daily combat
contain niccas with fairly strong backs
thorough cats
and when da trials attack
we stay calm and relaxed"

that was dope...but im tired of seein kats use shit like niggah nookah niccas and so on ......stop promoting racism and self-hate........be more creative in regards to that........but that was a good drop.........peace
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Old 11-19-04, 11:23 AM   #9
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O.k. Get Real.first Open A Book And Research The Origins Of The Word "nigger".you Will Find That The Word #1.was Not Intended To Mean A "black Person" And #2.has Become A Functional Part Of What Is Known To Modern Day America As Ebonics,(which Is Now Listed As A Secondary Language).
"nigger(s)" Is Now A Form Of Expression In What We Call "slang" Which Means A Person Other Than Ur Self;reffering To One Or More Persons In A Group,just As "hommie"=friend,or "crib"=place Of Residence.
Next Time You Choose To Critique A Persons Form Of Expression,do The Research,then When You Know What Ur Talking About Leave Feed.
Plus,it Doesn't Matter What Ur Tired Of Hearing,seeing,or Reading.this Is The Open Mic=free Expression.it's The Same Ignorance That Stopped You From Doing The Research,that Made A Group Of People Decide That "nigger" Was A Racist Word To Begin With.education Is The Key My Friend................
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Old 11-19-04, 11:25 AM   #10
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Oh And Thx For The Feedback..........................
Uppn...........................
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why cant white people call black people niggers??????????? racism is racism.......a white person cannot call a black (african american) a NIGGER you want to explain that one BOSS! express all you want......im just sayin be more creative and try to not use those words......and i dont really care if ebonics is a n official language.........its an official language of those who are opressed and live in slums and tend to not live in the business world or philosophical or other areas of great stature......the only people making it on ebonics are badd rappers and dumb athletes.....so unless you categorize yourself as eiter any one one of those feel free to have at it BOSS!!!!!!!!

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why cant white people call black people niggers??????????? racism is racism.......a white person cannot call a black (african american) a NIGGER you want to explain that one BOSS! express all you want......im just sayin be more creative and try to not use those words......and i dont really care if ebonics is a n official language.........its an official language of those who are opressed and live in slums and tend to not live in the business world or philosophical or other areas of great stature......the only people making it on ebonics are badd rappers and dumb athletes.....so unless you categorize yourself as eiter any one one of those feel free to have at it BOSS!!!!!!!!


white people can do as they please.call a black person a nigger and get ur ass whipped.thats how it goes because of wat's meant behind the word not the actual word itself.and i am from a place where thats how we speak and we are not ashamed of that.the same slum u reffered to,i live there.i became who i am today not thanx to corporate america and not thanx to philosophy.where i'm from it's survive or die.the street.and for your info. be glad for ebonics and every thing else that originated in the "slum".thats how corporate america(business world) makes most of it's money,by exploiting the same things that ur saying is so wrong.nigger,spic,chink,honkey,dothead......it's all the same.WORDS.
prime example:"Hip Hop" that was once a thing only dumb or bad people(STEREOTYPE) did but it inspired u to be on r.v. droppin verses.so if the slum and everything is so bad why r U even here my friend.i reffer to my self as a nigga' and it doesn't bother me.a white boy reffers to me ass a nigga' in a disrespectful way yeah i may fuk him up,but only because of what was behind the word that came out of his mouth.if it's all good it's all good.we can't keep blaming the utilization of one word ON IGNORANCE.and who r u to be tellin' me wat words to use anyway."BOSS", UR RIGHT.MY OPRESSED, SLUM ASS IS AND WILL ALWAYS BE THE BOSS BECAUSE I HAVE AN EDUCATION AND A DAMN GOOD RESUME.BEEN A BOSS SINCE I WAS 18.TOOK ME THREE MONTHS FROM ENTRY LEVEL TO GET THERE AND I AM THE BEST AT WHAT I DO WHICH IS WHY I CAN DROP OPEN MICS ALL DAY AND STILL GET PAID BUKU BUCKS TO DO SO.I STILL GO BAK HOME TO THE SLUM AND SPEAK EBONICS AT THE END OF THE DAY BECAUSE THATS WAT I DO,O.K........ BEING OPRESSED MAKES A MAN STRONG AND WISE AND ABLE TO FUNCTION FLAWLESSLY UNDER PRESSURE.THANK GOD,FOR THE SLUM HAS RAISED ME UP INTO THE MONEY MAKIN' NIGGA' I AM TODAY.NIGGA,NIGGA,NIGGANIGGANIGGA.HAHAHAHAHAHAH.
IM RICH BIOTCH................................
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Old 11-19-04, 05:04 PM   #13
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I Wasn't Callin U A Biotch,i Was Jus Fukin' Around.after All That Serious Shit Up There I Needed Sumn To Laugh At.
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