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Old 12-09-04, 10:31 AM   #1
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Exclamation BEEF (i see pussy) vol.2...

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***listen, there is no kind of special vocabulary in this piece at all. its just straight up anger twards these fuckin sissies on this site. i aint tryin to impress nobody wit this one. but i still want feedback***

(verse 1)
last time i flopped a bit so i stopped a bit
waited for you to drop some shit and i did see yo shit
you still sound like a bitch still aint landin no hits
yo fuckin punches aint shit i thought i told you dat shit
why continue this? but dont think im pussy cuz im sick of this
i just recognize yo old ass is also tired of this
cuz if im "elementuray" nigga im hyper as shit
so i run circles round both you dumbass nitwits
yall flows aint shit yall aint shit
yall on my dick get tha fuck off of it
cuz if me and killa was dat wack, you would've ended this
but too bad we cant stop givin tha hardest spits
so get back man, matter fact, get back BITCH
this aint real beef, its way too one-sided
nigga stop playin write some real shit, try singin some shit
cuz round here a nigga step up and fall back and shit
dont get mad cuz im hot and your not bitch...

***like i said, no type of special shit, just anger. i want some feedback though. includin some from tha hoes im talkin bout (drastic, shadow, and joker). get at me when you want war. i got young on my side and my nigga k-gutta. fuckin sissies. yall cant flow, so sing some beef my way. bastards...***
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Old 12-09-04, 11:20 AM   #2
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dont sleep on this, stop lookin if you not gone reply.
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Old 12-09-04, 11:42 AM   #3
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this was mediocre at best, got your point across though

but dude be more complex in your shit and less abc style

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Old 12-09-04, 12:56 PM   #4
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nice touch u used the same words a bit to much though
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Old 12-09-04, 01:45 PM   #5
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good piece here read da first part but didnt know wat to say lol......dis was a good SOLID piece str8 up.....i mean u did use some vocab words over n stuff other than dat dis was off da chain...keep reppin Detroit....9/10
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Old 12-09-04, 02:45 PM   #6
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Would be good if it was accompanied by some crunk beats.....
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Old 12-09-04, 10:06 PM   #7
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thanx to all so far. i did tha whole using tha same word over and over approach cuz i felt that my anger kept comin back like that. shit might not seem like it, but its pretty deep yall. lookin 4 more feedz...
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Old 12-09-04, 10:24 PM   #8
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Exclamation by the way.....

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im done wit rappin back and forth with these niggaz.
im just gone talk like a man and tell them whats up.
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Old 12-09-04, 10:29 PM   #9
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( continued from his shit)
...ok wuteva nigga i may not land tha punches but my shit still makes u twitch
my hands get tired of typin thangs to you but i still do it coz i kno u flinch
bitch y u take this beef to tha heart
i had this wrapped up from tha start
ikno because ur shit remind me of marky mark
u a funky bitch wit saggy tits and big lips
thats y u talk all that shit wen u spit
but it doesnt hit u miss me everytime im too fit
like roy jones but im from tha streets i might hit u wit my phone
dont sleep on me jus coz u aint in tha zone
im bobbin n weavin ur punches like a drivers course full of cones
from satan to me u will see soon that im demonic
my lyrics give u tha plague like tha bubonic
if iwanted to i cood spit faster than sonic
but i smoked to much chronic n my mind is slow
no mo of this beef i jus ended it so stay seated
if u dont best believe im gonna keep bringin tha heat
u wanna keep bringin me down it wont work
cuz ill come back everytime and rise to my feet
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Old 12-09-04, 10:30 PM   #10
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had to have tha last word
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Old 12-09-04, 10:35 PM   #11
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Quote:
Originally Posted by SR$
im done wit rappin back and forth with these niggaz.
im just gone talk like a man and tell them whats up.
4real




DOG...ur not even a man so how cood u possibly talk like one..grow a dick b4 u start talkin to grown folk nigga
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Old 12-10-04, 01:46 PM   #12
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u kilt him on tha 1
ha ha ma nigga u kilt them and it is ma tur nex
DPB NIGGA 4LIFE
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Old 12-10-04, 02:52 PM   #13
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aight heres what i think of it...it was good man..your bars are a lil short though..if you put two bars together you would have a good flow and some mulits...lemme show you wat im talkin about...
last time i flopped a bit
so i stopped a bit

if you put these together and make it

last time i flopped a bit so i stopped a bit//

make that shit like one bar cuz one that will make your flow tighter and it will give you some mulits in your verses...

thats just my 2 cents....tite verse though man...stay up 1
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Old 12-12-04, 02:34 PM   #14
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good lookin, i'll get right on that^^^
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Old 12-12-04, 04:56 PM   #15
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yo SR$

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yo son when we fenna collabo, so we can put dat QB and MUrda Town 2gether, lyke 50 & Em
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