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Old 12-19-04, 08:43 PM   #1
Shadow74
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poppin pills

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stop drop put tha gun on tha floor
already busted threw tha door shootin but i want sum more
i love to kill its a wonderful feel and my greatest thrill
still i can neva get enough so i started poppin pills
together it combines it amazing this shit iz blazing
while im raging threw ur hood u shood hit tha deck
expect me to inject you wit da bullets
cept if u flex u defintly get laid to rest
i am tha best out here i aint got nothin to fear
im comin at cha quicka than a tampa bay buccanear
if u scared sa so nigga i dont have to drop u off tha pier
but beware of all tha thangs i bear
i bear thangs to tear ur flesh
aks macks .357's anythang i got will commit tha 187
i aint stressin on nuthin...shit i died..game over sorta
jus as long as i keep playin fo another quarta
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Old 12-20-04, 03:05 AM   #2
Ike
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well.....you seriously need to elevate.....go to tutorials and see what multis, inners, metaphors, wordplay.....see what all that shit is.....
i honestly hated the concept of this.....how u love to kill? no...not feelin that.....and then you switched it to using drugs? just as bad....not feelin that either......
come up with something more original....just be you...rhyme about shit that matters....not killing...and popping pills...up your vocabulary a whole lot....read the dictionary or something.......and just learn words.....overall i give it a 1/10....sorry just the way i feel......just elevate....take the criticism and run with it....dont get mad...you will never get better that way.....
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