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12-19-04, 08:43 PM | #1 | ||||
Flyweight
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poppin pills
IP: 44C2 9543
stop drop put tha gun on tha floor
already busted threw tha door shootin but i want sum more i love to kill its a wonderful feel and my greatest thrill still i can neva get enough so i started poppin pills together it combines it amazing this shit iz blazing while im raging threw ur hood u shood hit tha deck expect me to inject you wit da bullets cept if u flex u defintly get laid to rest i am tha best out here i aint got nothin to fear im comin at cha quicka than a tampa bay buccanear if u scared sa so nigga i dont have to drop u off tha pier but beware of all tha thangs i bear i bear thangs to tear ur flesh aks macks .357's anythang i got will commit tha 187 i aint stressin on nuthin...shit i died..game over sorta jus as long as i keep playin fo another quarta |
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12-20-04, 03:05 AM | #2 | |||||||
No Relation To Tina
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IP: 7358 D119
well.....you seriously need to elevate.....go to tutorials and see what multis, inners, metaphors, wordplay.....see what all that shit is.....
i honestly hated the concept of this.....how u love to kill? no...not feelin that.....and then you switched it to using drugs? just as bad....not feelin that either...... come up with something more original....just be you...rhyme about shit that matters....not killing...and popping pills...up your vocabulary a whole lot....read the dictionary or something.......and just learn words.....overall i give it a 1/10....sorry just the way i feel......just elevate....take the criticism and run with it....dont get mad...you will never get better that way..... |
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