my structure may be off and the flow is pretty wreckless so i need feedback on this.

I was the one who broke the rules,skip't school
And wound up gettin' chips,whips,chicks,gunclips,bricks
Learned how to turn three into six
Doubled my money,work burnin' ya nose like it's Vicks
I'm on da corner takin'-da-risk,makin'-it-flip
Like my work was capable of acr-o-bat-ics
every fifty two(weeks in a year) since ninety two(1992/the year) they say Slick's back-on-dat-shit
P three eighty clap-o-mat-ic,get black-with-ma-gic
I'm mentally physical,thought patterns trivial
Fuck wit me this is my cir-icu-lum,nigga's got problems I'm-fixin-em
Like washed-cups I'm-rinsin'-dem,they washed-up
Leave souls leakin' from harsh-cuts
These pussy nigga's is hoe-sluts,i beat em up til they dead n got no-guts
dey get gun-fucked,now they matrix wires is un-plugg'd
Fab. fucked-up and told ya'll nigga's to breath-easy
around cancerous di-seases,killin' emcees-its the rea-sin(reason)why K.West said this game needs Gee-zes(Jesus)
I am the math-after the last-chapter of after math
They just like Graham-crackers,when I crack-crackers then sit in laughter
Im a city slicka in the slickest city my nigga's with me poppin' bottles,splittin' phillies
Watchin' me crush this herb leave Turmoil(cat from a different site)like a spliff-in-the-makin'
Roll on em wit a mashedy n mask like i'm bout to get lifted-wit-Jaysin(Jason=from the horror movies)
This kid talks shit like his ass n his face switched-in-placement
But yet ducked every battle I proposed this butthead is evasive
The breath of life in his lungs is just a gift-that's-been-wasted
typin' imaginary murk lists,u know that shits-fictionkid-face it
ur drops are lackin' strength,n ya' punches simplistic-n-basic
ur pencil'd in this game,i see ur existance erase-it,replace-it
with ur equivalent a homosexual sad-ist
I'm lockin' shit down like private communities peri-meters-gates-is
I stand strong against cliques n crews,my nigga's po-si-tion'd-adjacent
Til we spit violence like led bits projected from ca-sin's(shells the case the bullet)
They said ima softy,but sorry ya'll got in-cor-rect in-for-mation
I upp'd my spit a little,now I gotta structurally get a per-fec-ted for-mation

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I'm like CHUCKy dyin' to live in the flesh free of the BATTERY,
ASSAULT n ROBBERY rapidly,wishin' cupid would clap at me
N lift this evil spell so I can experience happilly evil backwards-see(down there)
EVIL............backwards =............LIVE

that was sorry man dam it had a buch of shit that didnt make sense and nursy rhymes llol it was weak

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yeah structure is off but u got a great wordplay an good punchlines.............................

yo return tha favor an give me feedbac on my open mic Quit Bittin' People Shit

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