it was a str8 peace but keep working on using more vocab and work on ur multis homes I see what u where trying to say but over all I give it a

8.6/10 here are the peaces I liked.


The family's lost souls floatin in a fish bowl
We unfold anger in a world so cold
You could've kept blue skies from pain
You could've stopped the sunny day from rain
But i know we can't change or relive the past
Livin in the past is just puttin your heart in a trap
A trap that the devil takes over without a sound
The family grows apart and runs thru the same grounds

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