Work on ya structure..chop it down short and simple
complexity...got wha u was tryin 2 say..jus complex it
throw some more metas and similies in there
seemed kinda basic
wordplay and vocab was ok
your delivery was better than your set up
set ups were kinda lame..cant jus throw anything before a punch

work on them things and u should make it here

*Nuff Said*

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