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marvjay...................
i doubt dis fag win,datz y im laughin,hotshh go run & tell a admin...
im laughin,cuzz ya cash thin its "girls on my 2 fukk list" but u add-men..
used laughin twice....not good....good punch....multis were ok

basically,ya basic b u been waitin patiently..till da day u was facin me..
u da fakest g,no guns u got beef u gon spray em with mase then flee...
i liked this bar.....1st line was nice....shoulda used the same rhyme scheme with that many multis on the 2nd line......but still nice....

roc'n a rainbow flag at gay riots ya cd i aint buyin my killa's? they ridin
homie jay violent,try it i ask u if u was "HOT" rv just stayed "quiet"..*shh*
lol the punch was tight....but as far as the multis....up them....only 2 in each line....up the amount of syllables in each multi too......



Hotshh...............
Paralyze ya Textures....Apply the Pressure have You Die in Stretchers
Fry him Extra,Ya heart dont Pump blood..So U'll have to Lie in Ketchup
nice punch....nice multis....nothing wrong with this bar....nice

Look, Ya Timings Lack..plus ya Rhymings That, make You Kinda Wack
Dishem Like a Dime of Crack Behind da Back, 2 broke 2 Rewind it back
nice multis.....what can i say?

Shit, you Figure Racing against this kid You Facing?... it's Obliteration
Leave ya Liver Wasted, You shoulda 'No Show'd' Like Tigre Basement
again a pretty good punch....and pretty good multis...liked the 1st line better though....better multis

from Far Away Ill leave U Scar'd and Slayed, You Starved and Played
Fars I Say kid You arent "JAY"..ranked number 1009 cuz Marvin's Gaye
decent multis here....punch was good.....


overall i voted for hotshh for more syllable in his multis...and more of them....i felt that his punches hit harder too....not that that matters all that much.......

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