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02-08-05, 02:49 AM
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My Divine- Your Intro to .Willy.Killyoo
IP: 13A4 AD49
in touch deep feelings swirl, paused slightly moving
-Big.Willybutterflies crumble over time- and mine is a divine kind proving to you in these moods a purpose worth pursuing covers smile- tumble.smolder.grind- and mine is a divine kind in you- i am- in me is hidden.... in you inside pain holds when parting- sorrow for tommorows hand planning yesterdays for years coming soon on our own land borrow your light for my eyes so you can shade a love our love- more love than others bother to care when touched touched so deeply souls connect to build fine shelters and mine is a divine kind......... still divine forever.
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02-10-05, 04:31 PM
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IP: 4D7A 8956
It was a good poem only I was supposed to know what it is but is it to a girl or you know. Well it was expressed very well. Only thing I didn't like in it was that it had hardly any vocab that would make it more complex. I love complex poems.
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02-10-05, 06:48 PM
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IP: 28AD 5545
awwwwwwwww....i thought this was beautiful, it flowed well, and i like how you expressed the divine part, i loved it, keep it up.
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02-12-05, 12:41 AM
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IP: 13A4 AD49
thank you guyz, the feedback both of you... upping.
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