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02-22-05, 12:06 PM
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need feed bakk this song is heart felt madd deep
IP: 026D 173E
this is a song for my past boi so please dont be rude with yer feed bakk
(hook)these eyes.. bear to see tha truth today... these eyes.. when tha lord took my homie away... vegancy is just not fair,its all good homie and ill see ya when i get there VERSE1:02, 11, 2005, a day that a part of tha northsyde died... we all shed tears and grieved wit respect.... a friend past away he was one of tha best... hands down visions of u in our mind.... of tha past comin bakk like we pressed rewind.. memorys of tha times that we all shared.. reaapear in our head like yer still there... recall tha days when we chiled up in yer bassment.. floor hocky bustin knees on tha pavement.... b4 that we would head down to tha pond... passin hours on our skates it was great now hes gone... remember when u assisted on that double play.. little league was tha bomb bakk in those days... picthing balls stopin pucks and taggin bases.. u were one off a kind in our mind no replacement... then hook again like tha first.................. VERSE2  k well it ill bum me out everytime i drink...i go to school cant learn cause its hard to think.... and i still see yer face when i close my eyes... u in my heart everyday cant say goodbye..... u was my man had my bakk, playa pucks was ya gat... and yo neva was a rat, we respect u fer dat... u was solid as a roc, ppl listened when u talk.... had tha forum on lock always stoped every shot.... and u always had a story that could make us laugh.... so many memories that could take us bakk.... and at times we was close could shoot tha shit... place tha skates hit tha wake shoot sum hoopz and shit.. and when we had a class we would kick it together... and when were fellin lazy we would skip it together... and i look to tha sky as i scream yer name.... tha day u left god cried thats why it rained.... and i kno u watchin from clouds above... so ill see u when i get there man itss all love..... my boi was really into hockey and sports R.I.P 87-05
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 R.I.P ALEX JOHNSON 1987-2005 MAY ANGELS GUIDE U TOO THA GATEz[URL=http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=178375]
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02-22-05, 12:37 PM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 61C8 6718
May your friend rest in peace first of all...
It was pretty obvious that emotion was the strongest aspect of your piece, I liked how you brought us the memories and told us what kinda person he was. May edit your structure a little so it's easier to read but it didn't have any effect on the content. The hook was really good, very raw and pure emotion. The sadness was there but also the respect and the friendship n love that will never go away. Gotta give you props for being able to put your deepest feelings into this drop...nice going! DQ
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02-22-05, 01:12 PM
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IP: 026D 173E
ayo yo com on yall post sum feed bakk please man i put alot of energy when i rapped it man please reply to this yall it would be madd respectful thanx
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02-22-05, 01:41 PM
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IP: 11AF 50EC
damn sorry to hear bout ur friend n may he rest in peace
but word up, dis was a good piece, u def. put a shit load of emotion into dis n dats wat counts da most, usually dont c dat much round here.........overrall dope peace....keep it up...1 |
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02-22-05, 06:10 PM
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IP: FEFC E273
this sucked............................
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02-22-05, 06:15 PM
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Bow Chicka Bow Wow
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IP: FEFC E273
it really sucked
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02-22-05, 06:25 PM
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IP: 026D 173E
man fukk u u fukin disrepectful piece of shit id fukk stomp on yer head if i eva met u u fukkin ignorant piece of shit have sum compassion if it was one of yo bois it be different but yo i aint even like dat i dont disrespect ppl but any way dude fukk you u goof
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02-22-05, 06:30 PM
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Bow Chicka Bow Wow
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IP: FEFC E273
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let me help you out here kid man fuck you, you fucking disrepectful piece of shit, I'd fuck stomp on your head if i ever met you. You fucking ignorant piece of shit have some compassion if it was one of your boys it would be different but yo i ain't even like that i dont disrespect people but any way dude fuck you, you goof maybe if you could spell you would be better at poetry ok you goof |
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02-22-05, 06:38 PM
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IP: 5867 FD83
i dont know why New Method is beefing you, i felt this ... it was basic and i like that..the vocab wasnt complex and thats what made this verse stand out. it was overall a good open mic. i think the reason not many have responded is b/c of lack of activity in poetic scripts. i for one have been in this forum twice now. after reading this, i sincerely feel ill visit this forum more often. thanks for opening my eyes. good stuff, respects to your homeboy. see you around.
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02-22-05, 06:40 PM
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IP: 36EF FE17
hmmm. I don't believe but yeah may he rest in peace.
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02-26-05, 09:32 PM
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IP: 26CD 099E
nice song, homie, RIP to ur boi...very respectable to his life and all that, it was deep...dope song
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02-27-05, 02:59 AM
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IP: 93C0 D1DD
Alright Pretty Decent Man, Only Thing Is Your Structure You Fucked It Up Really bad But The Emotion In This Piece Was Good, You Stayed Totally On The Topic Which Was Decent I Found It Good Man, Vocabulary Was Cool, Try Add more Complex Lines Though If You Feel Me...7/10 |
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