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Old 03-27-05, 12:05 AM   #1
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Cool Fragments...(Keystyle)

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Now, It's RapVerse I've Cursed, My Landing Reimburst By The Killins, Drug Dealins, Merkin Kats Feelins So The Sins For My Spirit Will Never Reach The Ceilin, Elevated To The Top, Smashed Down Hittin.
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The Grandson, Goliath, Known As One Of A Kind.
To Spit Lines That Cause Flatlines And Break Spines.
Who Could Endeavor Strikes From The Lyric Session.
Mirror Testin To Beat This Demon, Leavin Minds In Misconception.
A Vital State To Mistake The Soul Like Morgan's Coma.
A Loner, Dispersin Foes Parts Like Organ Donars.
Given Little To Use, Now I'm On The Block Humble.
Gettin Paid To Merk Stumbles And More To Swap Bundles.
Nonetheless, The Stress That I Built Showed Real.
A Cold Kill In Secret, Cops Can't Find The Stowed Steel.
The Question That Preceeds It's Limit, No Gimmicks.
Is How Can A Dead Man As Myself Create Counter Physics?
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Old 03-27-05, 12:37 AM   #2
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Old 03-27-05, 12:38 AM   #3
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yo it flowed perfect and and really good wordplay but u had no topic so i couldnt relate too anything if u drop a dope open mic that i feel is really good u might be able ta join our crew cuz i could sense talent u just have ta spit bout sumthin that makes more sense.....6.5/10 not bad for ur 1st post
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Old 03-27-05, 12:57 AM   #4
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I Had No Intent On Making It Make Pure Sense..
The Title Is Fragments..
Unfinished Drop..
Soon To Drop As I Develop More Knowledge..
Feedback Is Appreciated...
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Old 03-27-05, 01:14 AM   #5
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wow pretty good piece here flow was almost perfect rhymes were good structre was ight just elevate a lil and ya could join our crew
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Old 03-27-05, 06:36 AM   #6
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Old 03-27-05, 06:47 AM   #7
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yo Goliath send me maybe atleast an 8 line verse and have it make sense but make sure it has same flow and wordplay as this...if u pull it off u could join
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Old 03-27-05, 01:04 PM   #8
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good good... a style you don't see too much anymore... idk why but it kidna reminds me of obie trice... except good... lol.. but i like it.. good vocab. and decent structure even though i don'tcare about that shit... overall it was decent... return the favor "back at it"
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