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03-26-05, 07:32 AM
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...OUTSTANDING...
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Bear Necessities Part 1
IP: 3EEE C909
I had visions 2 be a emcee like ceo of cs mr. sv,
Im rich sweet and nutty with wraps like nestle, I constantly improve my plan 2 advance under any circumstance, I will surpass many, and impress all, my call a perfect chance, My family brought the best, loved ones those i hold so dear, 2 rise 2 the occassion sweat blood and tears, 2 earn this here, father bred the best, so many life tests, Unexpected alternate moods made me crazy like ozzfest, Never the less my mind lines rymes like depps nose in blow, No matter the weather i just try 2 flow, I just drop mine like a turd floating in a septic tank, Look out for me im on the take, catch me at the bank.  " Hes a floater. "
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03-26-05, 07:53 AM
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...OUTSTANDING...
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IP: 3EEE C909
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03-30-05, 01:51 PM
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...OUTSTANDING...
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IP: 1742 B7F3
Drop some feedback for me. Please.
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03-30-05, 02:17 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: 3205 57D1
basiclly this verse sucked man.. your structure was off.. your flow was off, and you had bad vocab... and i really don't get what this verse was suppose to be about at all?? Basiclly just work on making your o.m. making sence, and no elementary rhymes...
4/10
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03-30-05, 02:21 PM
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Peace, Love, Unity
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IP: AB23 98FF
wasn't "bear necessities" a song someone sung in some cartoon movie?
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03-30-05, 02:22 PM
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Peace, Love, Unity
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IP: AB23 98FF
the mother fuckin jungle book... wasn't it?
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03-30-05, 02:27 PM
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Cus I Jus Ma$fit Dis Shit
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IP: B6F3 F93A
naw...wasnt hittin at all man...i think u can do betta...but if u cant...give up...no hate but dats truth
-DB
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03-30-05, 02:29 PM
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Peace, Love, Unity
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IP: AB23 98FF
I constantly improve my plan 2 advance under any circumstance,
I will surpass many, and impress all, my call a perfect chance, ^^^I liked that line.. but thats about it.. word
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03-31-05, 09:58 AM
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IP: 117B 13D8
I posted in here because im new and dont know anything. I want 2 learn and elevate. This was the 1st verse i ever wrote before. Thank you 4 trying 2 make me feel like shit. I dont care tho. I get pussy.
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03-31-05, 10:01 AM
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IP: 117B 13D8
And its called Bear Necessities because my famly and friends call me bear. Symbolic. And its about my thoughts on stuff.
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03-31-05, 01:23 PM
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Peace, Love, Unity
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IP: AB23 98FF
word...........
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03-31-05, 01:27 PM
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IP: 28AD 5545
Hmmm... This was different
Really wasnt hitten well... Really wasnt feeling it sorry... Yourr structure was off.. your flow was off,... and you had bad vocab... Keep elevating ..
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04-01-05, 09:02 PM
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Flyweight
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IP: 3240 794D
yo that was good. good use of vocab and nice structure. the first punchline was a lil' whack though. but overall good job.
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06-03-05, 02:05 PM
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IP: 0825 899A
You Seem To Be More Of An Audio Emcee...
Cuz This Verse Definately Didnt Fit For Text... Like I Saw What You Were Tryna Do And I Saw Raw Talent... But You Need Some Work If You Want To Stay Text... But I'd Be Interested In Hearing An Audio By You... (If I Had Speakers) .One. |
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