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Old 04-25-05, 12:20 PM   #1
NarKotic
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My rap tactics are like acrobatic backflips
while most styles i've seen are 99.9% wackness
I lash out of the blackness to laserate facious rappers
SO fuck ya notions I'll leave you frozen stuck in poses
Guns'n roses thugs'n flows'n drugs'n hoes'n a lack of funds for clothes
Its Insanity, like a muthafucka try'n to damage me
Thats Fantasy, like a P.O. try'n to handle me
Yo Im lost with no way out, but thats ok today i'm bringing it to you play by play,
to spray my way out, I got a grip, I grab the shit and bombed the side entrance,
I feel the force of the darkside and i play wit vengence, wit no repentence, to become number one could be why i ceese your whole existence, cause your whole exsistence in one word is bitchness, but this flowing keeps me going cause i feed off your resistence, Its like Armeggedon your dreadin my every words upsetting, its abserd where i'm heading and it aint close to heavin, im the verbal sergeon word surfin rhyme servin, like american history X bitch emcees i be curbin, i'm verbaly disturbing, distructive hostile and discusting, the most mis-trusted rushin wit raw reprecusions, i'm crushin and cussin and bustin like volcanic eruptions, fuck an introduction, I spit shitty, gritty, and kick filthy ignorant buligerant facts when rhymen, and acts of violence, i was an adolescent that lacked guidence, i lied to get by, i was sceaming for my dreams like there was demonsin my mind telling me to get high, !!whoa!! I'm boisterous, my words turn poisoness when im spitten raps, because my style stays stacked like Jennifer Lopez from the back.......What!!
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Old 04-25-05, 12:48 PM   #2
Calm
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ummm not really feelin this one.. u need work on ya word play and metas. your usage of multis needs work as well. just rhymin words to match doesnt work. and ya bar structure is foul. its hard to follow the rhyme scheme the stretched lines fuck up the scheme as well.
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Old 04-25-05, 12:55 PM   #3
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your structure n scheme started ok, but you losts ya flow
within the 1st 3 bars, it was stretched with not very many inner ryhmes
n your compleity n content was rather simplistic at best....
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not much else to say, elevate, no hate
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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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fake fucks..move on...!
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