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04-27-05, 11:22 PM | #1 | |||
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Metaphorically Speaking
IP: 3CAE 6243
“Metaphorically Speaking”… (society is shit)
I just want to say…:
“The declaration is erroneously spoke
P-Please, let me speak metaphorically I’ll continue to live by my own philosophy Society is a fucking joke, and it’s no joke…” Listen:
I, to cry a thousand times, to bleed profusely from my eyes To wish the world would not lead to it’s own demise I, to stampede, like a thousand unbridled horses I, to have dreams, for I too, dream of Porsches I wish to abort abortion, I think it’s murder I, to hear the whispers of a babies lost murmur To weep with them, and I have felt the sorrow Of those who know trepidation of not living tomorrow My eyes are a waterfall, I cry the tears of my people Black, white, brown, color is only for the feeble Then come the weekend, I’m always weakened Laboring double shift, I find it rather tiresome They say I tire some, with my many philosophies Well pardon me, for speaking metaphorically I feel empathically, and I’ve known struggle I, to feel your pain doubled when I’m on the double I, to gaze at the night’s stars, to think metaphysically After thousands of years, why haven’t we alleviated poverty? I, to suppurate, to wail, for the whale is a beautiful animal To cry once more, for numbers of species extinct is natural I, to ponder god’s will, saying we all came from Adam I, to ponder the science that says we all came from atom I, to shed tears, to glower and question our government T’was them that abounded the columbine shooters with weapons And I, to wonder why, were sent to war, to slay our brothers To wonder what has happened, to love from one human to another They, to say that violence is not the answer, so why, why… Why must we still be sent to countries to fight, and to die? We are blood cells, we live life in vain, so incise mine For I, would rather not cry till the end of time I, to give these signs of hope, but yet no one listens So I cry once more, for life isn’t worth living I, to once again proliferate hate for our damned government Why did they categorize us with races, countries and continents? T’was them, that caused chauvinism, racism disgusts me Were are all human, we are all the same species So I cry, for if we all lived as one, and shared our money Then there wouldn’t be any reason left for poverty If we united, we’d create an unstoppable force “the power of one” Yet I am the one, to cry, to mourn the death of god’s most beloved son I, to weep for a savior, whose death was in spite, sorrow grasps me And so, on Pegasus’s back I lead, angelic troops of high ranked Ptolemy I, am whatever you want me to be, I am nothing... but a mere message Now do you know why, I question why? For no man bothers to learn the lesson So now do you know why, I constantly cry? For no man listens to me I, to be the one, to be ignored, for I… am just speaking metaphorically Last edited by ~Genius~ : 04-28-05 at 07:08 PM. |
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04-28-05, 07:08 PM | #2 | |||
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IP: 3CAE 6243
Upping, you cock sucking hill billies
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04-28-05, 08:55 PM | #3 | |||
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IP: 3CAE 6243
Hi!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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04-28-05, 09:44 PM | #4 | |||
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04-28-05, 09:49 PM | #5 | |||||||
The Games Prodigy
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IP: A729 7192
FIYA mayne peep mines tell me whut u think
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04-28-05, 10:07 PM | #6 | |||
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IP: 3CAE 6243
.......... thats it, lol short feed back but much apreciated
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04-28-05, 10:47 PM | #7 | ||||
leave you rest'n pz's
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IP: 79B1 EDD4
lol,....damn, i dont think alot of people will get the whole of this
piece, i mean the vocab, and concept prolly flys over their heads imagery n silimies were nice throughout,"metaphorically speakin" was a good topic to tackle, i found it a little repetitive with the "i, to..." but it worked with this topic, i liked how you touched on alot of different views n blended them together, it was long... ending was pretty koo, how you stated you may be ignored cuz your only speakin metaphorically.....overall dope drop fam . we also talked bout this on msn, you kno my thoughts on this piece
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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts what the fuck, was you high..? did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...! . . fake fucks..move on...! |
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04-28-05, 10:52 PM | #8 | |||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 3CAE 6243
fuck to the ya hoe, i'll rtf on yours soon to
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04-28-05, 11:11 PM | #9 | ||||
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IP: 0AE0 3B1A
This was an iight peice..could have been better..
Wordplay was good , nice vocab , i felt it could have been alittle better though..Nice structure.... really was feeling the topic.. I felt that the concept could have been alot better... In my opinion... I also felt , that you could have used alittle more imagery. You had nice feeling , and good imagery.. Overall this was a good peice...i was really feeling it.. Keep it up
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04-29-05, 10:16 AM | #10 | ||||
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IP: E3CA 7CA2
Pretty descent drop. I was feeling 3/4 of it. I liked the creativeness, but I think you lacked on good rhyming. Most of yo rhyming words were pretty predictable, but by far, this was an above average drop...
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04-30-05, 06:36 PM | #11 | ||||
R.I.P
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IP: 3CAE 6243
wow.................. all I can say
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